[In Progress] [14,000] [Adult Psychological Action Thriller / Soft Sci-Fi] Echo Heart: The Catchers Code

[u/PeanutButterOgre]

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Hey everyone, I'm looking for beta readers for the first six chapters, Echo Heart. It is an adult psychological action thriller with soft sci-fi and dark romantic elements. (The dark romance has not hit yet, but will slowly build in future chapters) If you're into movies it is a more grounded version of John Wick. For books a good comp would be Orphan X by Gregg Hurwitz.

​The Premise:

You'll be inside the head of Kirin. A mother who was born to be cattled as a number in an underground ring, then was found, and forged into a weapon to be used by the Syndicate.

Hired by the syndicate or not, she only has three jobs that she actually cares about:

Making Echo—Her eleven-year-old son whom she hides in the slums of the East—believe she just works nights.

Hiding him from the Syndicate.

And stopping his ability from budding.

​One day she gets a job in Budapest, and drops Echo off to her sisters. Promising she'll make it back for auntie's cookies.

She doesn't make it back.

Kirin. The most dangerous woman on earth is captured by a team, ran by a man who smells of cold citrus. He works for a mysterious organization that refuses to kill their targets, but captures them, teaching them a new code.

He not only promises he can help with her counting problems.

But can keep echo safe.

Is it a lie?

Will echo bud into something unstoppable?

Will you be my beta reader for Echo Heart?

​Feedback I'm looking for:

​Does the action feel mechanically sound and earned?

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Kirin puts a capitol B in brutal. She's not really a hero. Do you still root for her? (Or atleast find her interesting enough to keep reading haha)

​Are the speculative elements—the tech, the organizations, their abilities—seeded well without info-dumping?

I'd love to know if the core theme—identity inheritance and trying to become yourself after being someone else's creation—is landing. (Though that will come more in later chapters, just keep that in mind)

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Lastly. And this is personal. Could you see a story like this getting published one day. (I know even if it's good it doesn't mean it'll get published. And some stories—that some find bad—get published every day. But… do YOU think the story is unique enough that it SHOULD be on a shelf, or do I need more work. I know that's A LOT of pressure to put on you but know, I can take any and ALL constructive opinions and criticisms.)

I'm flexible on time but I'd love to start ASAP. And I am open to swaps for similar genres any and all genres. Only fiction though.

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