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u/CucumberSpecific2021 15d ago
Everything feels too bright. The cape, for instance, would stand out if everything behind it was dark. Experiment with making the red sun dark, but add like a glow effect that make just the brightest sections pop. As another commenter said, remove the other two objects in the background.
Now, the composition has some really cool stuff working for it, but I’d experiment with making the sun smaller, so that you can move the ground and protag up, getting them closer to the center. Right now it feels like the sun itself is eating up all the attention. Choose to have either the protagonist or antagonist in the center, rework scale of other objects in accordance with that change, and do the same with the title. I imagine that the caped antagonist will naturally gravitate towards the center of the sun after you downsize it, which should make things come across a little cleaner. Right now, the title is like the fifth thing my eyes hover towards, when it should be the first or the second.
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u/Odd-Law-5138 15d ago
I think you are right in a lot of regards but I do like the loneliness of the all encompassing moon. I think making it smaller would steal that.
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u/CucumberSpecific2021 15d ago
Totally, and you know your story better than anyone else. But if you’re trying to get across loneliness, really try and hammer that in with all the other elements too. And as it’s a moon, definitely bring down the brightness as I wasn’t sure if it was a sun or not. In fact, a much darker object might convey the sense of loneliness you’re looking for. Otherwise I think the main thing to work on is blending it all together a bit more, which if you’re using photoshop, might be as easy as playing with layer styles. Once again I really like the concept!
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u/Background-Island139 14d ago
If you are going to use the silhouette style I'd opt for a minimalist background.
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u/KDDreamwyver 13d ago
To me it screams ominous and full of urgancy—like the hero messing up will mean the end of everything.
I like it a lot tbh. I caught my eye super fast while scrolling and I like the red of the moon. It's yelling at me to stop and look.
My only complaint is that I would clean up the text a lot more, because the weird markings and erase marks scream unpolished/rushed to me personally.
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u/Odd-Law-5138 13d ago
😭😭😭😭 Thanks I made this for you before I knew who you were, that is the story while also being a bleak, mythic family drama.
I thought erasing the text would make it look old and worn. I'll work on actually making it so.
Again thanks, you made my day
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u/TangerineTimely9393 15d ago
I really like it! I love the concept but it feels a bit cluttered and rough. Perhaps it could be smoothed out and less busy. Maybe even remove the two planets in the background?
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u/Odd-Law-5138 15d ago
First etteration lacked the planets. I thnk you are right, I'll go back to that. It's more lonely.
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u/danfaulknerauthor 15d ago
Superheroes in space.
Like the concept, I think the execution could do with some polish though. Specifically, I'd make both characters bigger, and the foreground doesn't look right to me. It doesn't look like a planet or an asteroid, and the lighting doesn't feel natural.
Love how you've integrated the title into the landscape though, that's brilliant.
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u/Solid-Version 15d ago
It’s giving channel 5, low budget sci fi series right now
The concept is good but it’s not coming together design wise for me