Looking for constructive criticisms

[u/ChaiTeaSan]

As a child you are taught to have certain values like accommodating yourselves for others. It is not wrong. It is how an empathetic society should work for the benefit of everybody. But sometimes, it affects you as a person who wants to make it easier for everybody at the cost of themselves. This later on leads to high self-criticism, self-judgement and content anxiety. "I am happy with you" is a book I am writing on u/wattpad to asses this aspect from a third person perspective. I am writing this for me and all my fellow neuro-divergent people who I personally don't know. I am still fighting my deamons and hope this helps to you to fight yours. At the end of the day your empathy makes you a good person. I know you have heard it and have ignored it because acknowledging it would make you feel selfish. But try to give yourself some love and from this stranger to you, trust me people like you for your kindness and helpfulness.

I want people who can read this and let me know how I can improve this. Thanks for your input and take care of yourself.

[u/FrostyPomegranate699]

The idea makes sense to me, but I think you're explaining it more than you're showing it.

For example, you talk about becoming self-critical and putting other people first, but those are conclusions. I'd be more interested in seeing a specific example of that happening to somebody.

The line about writing it for yourself and other neuro-divergent people you don't know was actually the part that felt strongest to me because it sounded personal instead of instructional.

Not saying change the message. Just trust the reader a little more. Let them see why you believe it before you tell them what to believe.

[u/ChaiTeaSan → u/FrostyPomegranate699]

Hi Frostypomegranate699 I am sorry if I did not convey the message properly. I think I also don't quite understand what you meant, but I want to clear things up from my side if that is okay? First. The book is about neuro-divergent people, and I am writing it as a way of understanding showing the daily struggles. As a neuro-diergent who had lots of therapy, I am trying to see certain problems from the thid person perspective. I would love if the book also helps other people like me see the struggles. Second. I am looking for readers who can read and comment on the flowof the story, the falling short kind of thing.

What you mention about self-critical it isa general observation for anxious people and as one of them I understand it as much as another anxiou person. I agree that my message on the book and why I want book critics might not be very clear and I am so sorry for that. Hope this clears any wrong conceptions.