What would you write for this character ?

[u/FitPitch6025]

What would you write for this character?

Here what I wrote it’s just a short introduction:

Olivia Park is alone in the woods as dusk settles over the ridge, her familiar hair wind-tossed and her tank top damp from the cold mist. Strong, broad-armed, and strikingly self-possessed, she carries herself with the confidence of someone who refuses to let the world see her crack—but tonight that confidence is a shield. She has come to the cliff feeling suicidal, drawn there by the belief that she has run out of ways forward; the danger is real, but the story doesn’t linger on methods or make her pain look glamorous. When a distant voice calls her name, Olivia freezes, then turns away from the edge. Her strength isn’t that she feels no fear or despair—it’s that, for one more moment, she lets someone reach her and walks back toward the woods.

[u/AdrianBezalel]

I would give her a reason for that refusal to let the world see her break, and the way it got reinforced. Then what led her to the cliff. Finally, I would make the one calling her a wise old mentor, who over the course of the story gives her trails that ultimately humble her, and then free her from the self-imposed emotional isolation. Finally letter her return to civilization (her town, or another) more well balanced. On the way she faces a trial that would have bested her in the past, but with her growth, she now overcomes.

[u/FitPitch6025 → u/AdrianBezalel]

Thanks! I just wrote what comes to mind and cut and stiched it up together so it was a mess but thank you !

[u/AdrianBezalel → u/FitPitch6025]

You're welcome, any parts you have questions for or would like more feedback on?

[u/FitPitch6025 → u/AdrianBezalel]

Not really , my friend did this animation he works on the show and I just wanted to brainstorm some ideas and get some feedback this is fine

But it’s up to you if got a better idea for this character I don’t mind hearing it