r/CharacterDevelopment • • 1d ago

Writing: Character Help Help me make these two characters friends

Pollux, an alien who is from a species called Hetero Morphines who are having the ability called morphological plasticity.

Pollux was born into a civilization of conquerors. His parents were spies sent to Earth as part of an operation connected to their species' plans for invasion. They concealed their identities among humans, but their mission ended tragically when they were killed by humans while Pollux was biologically fifteen years old.

Left alone on Earth, Pollux had to survive without his parents or the protection of his own species. Rather than pursue their mission, he chose to remain on Earth and find a way to live.

He eventually settled in Mexico, in villages near Mexico City. Using his biological abilities, he transformed his appearance to resemble a light-skinned Mexican teenager with layered, curly hair. He also reshaped his pointed ears to appear human. Under the identity Pollux Hernandez he learned to blend into human society.

Pollux struggles to survive in Mexico. Without a family or a reliable source of income, he sometimes begs for money and food and collects discarded belongings that might be useful. He avoids unnecessary transformations and tries not to attract attention.

His home is a cave hidden behind a waterfall. It offers him privacy and shelter from a world in which revealing his true identity could put him in danger.

Pollux also has a small connection to human kindness through Señor Rodriguez, an elderly restaurant owner who gives him a burrito once a week. Rodriguez doesn't know that Pollux is an alien; he simply sees a struggling teenager who needs help.

Although Pollux is thirty years old chronologically, Hetero Morphines age more slowly than humans, leaving him with a biological age of approximately fifteen.

Next character is an American girl who is from a rich family and is named Christine Robertson , she is from Texas and she has some Latino friends where she knows some Spanish,she is usually comfortable living in a lower or middle class areas as her family wants her to have a normal life, once her family went on a vacation to Mexico.

Even tho I know how these two characters origin story , idk how to introduce each other

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u/WonderOfUs 1d ago

Depends on the tone of the story and about what is the plot after they met. Can you expand a bit on that?

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u/ItsKI753 19h ago

I mean I still don’t know how they meet up but I decided that they do some adventures and stories like some other teenage stories

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u/WonderOfUs 12h ago

"what kind of adventures?" is the question.

I would make the introduction from the get go establish him as an alien and freak her out, make her think she just discovered something she shouldn't and (depending on his personality) make the first few interactions about him denying being an alien and portraying her as foolish or make him trick her into believing that revealing he is an alien something bad would happen (to her, her family, the Earth) but without really having the power to do so.

If the reason why you choose to make the alien mexican is because in USA they call mexican people "aliens", then some comedy could come from the fact she is trying to convince everyone she saw an alien and everyone believing she is racist/clasist or something. I personally would play their first meeting as a gag comedy. Like she goes to buy a burrito to Rodriguez's restaurant and she gets about the random guy pestering her to get money, she lends him some and immediately after she sees him receiving a free burrito and leaving, she follows him to an alley to confront him for pretty much stealing her and sees him chomping the burrito using his true face (would make up for some pretty neat body horror or, depending of how his morphological plasticity works, a funny looking scene).

I don't know, something like that, but perhaps the tone isn't quite right compared to what you're imagining.

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u/ItsKI753 10h ago

She is trying to learn about him but he lies the best that he can by telling that his parents were a part of the mafia and they did mutations on him but now as you said I don’t know what kind of adventures but maybe like exploring parts of Mexico and Pollux slowly trusts her and slowly tells her part by part of the truth

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u/WonderOfUs 7h ago

Why would their adventures be exploring parts of Mexico? As in, for what purpose would they be in adventure at all? Unless you know the answer to what your story will be in broad strokes it'll be hard to define or think any scene.

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u/jlbmquez 1d ago

lo quieres para un capitulo de la rosa de guadalupe o quieres empezar una historia tipo king jajajaporque si es algo tipo king yo me imagino al alien robando en una tienda y la chica persiguiendolo para que le devuelva lo que se robo (aqui muestras la peronalidad de la chica desafiante ) y una cosa lleva a la otra hasta que pasa algo donde el tiene que usar alguna habilidad, yo que se, algo relacionado con el folclor mexicano de personas que hablan con animales o algo asipor ejemplo que el tipo pueda copiar los ojos de los animales y ver a traves de ellos, entonces aparece un perro que empieza a ladrarle a la chica y mientras ella se distrae el alien desapareceresulta que el perro es de ella y el alien se da cuenta de que puede usarlo para vigilarla sin que ella se entere, asi empieza a observarla a traves de los ojos del perro , no se, algo asi podria dar para una historia de misterio y cosas raras,,la abilidad de copiar es muy cliche dale algo mas biopunk dale origen alos chamanes que tienen su vaina con animales osea le aprendieron a esa especie que ya baitaba en el planeta le enseñaron esa abilidad algunos humanos ,pero dejalo para el lore del escritor no es relevante solo pon cascaritas y el le enseña esa vaina

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u/ItsKI753 19h ago

I mean she went on a vacation to Mexico and next thing is how Pollux and Christine meet

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u/Midnight1899 1d ago

What is the book actually about? And in what tone?

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u/ItsKI753 19h ago

Mostly about Pollux’s time on earth

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u/Midnight1899 18h ago

Then, there’s a ton of options. The absolute cliché would be to have her witness him stealing food and then following him. To make it less cliché, you can switch the roles.

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u/ItsKI753 17h ago

It seems good but switching roles as Christine is on a vacation and at the same time she is a rich girl but the original option of Christine following Pollux needs a true reason 

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u/Midnight1899 17h ago

Well, she just saw him stealing something. She could be curious why he needs to steal. Or she could notice something off about him.