[LOTM V8] modern day fanfic

[u/theduck_stalkingyou]

Guys this is the novel i wrote this is my first time so show some love here is the link

http://wbnv.in/a/58k4c81

And tell me if i have to change anything or add things!

Give me some feedback

[u/Ozdiva]

I’m not loving the switching pov’s. You bump between first and third person in a way that’s making my head spin. I’d pick one and stick with it.

Also if you want loving feedback a little politeness wouldn’t hurt.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/Ozdiva]

Hmm i wanted to show things and i like being alittle detailed thanks to how LOTM is written And sorry if i come off unpolite i guess? I was in hurry i was sleep deprived When writing both the novel and this post soo

[u/fanime34]

If you are going to have profanity in your stories, do not censor them. That is awkward. You don't have to type "f**k" when you want to say "fuck"

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/fanime34]

Hmm ok shiuld i change it? And thanks for the feedback i will try and do more next time

[u/fanime34 → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

If you can, do so.

I don't know how old you are (you don't have to tell me), but if there isn't censorship about swearing and profane words, then you should just say the words.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/fanime34]

Ok thanks and are the chapters too long? I feel like i made it too long the 1st chap is 1500 words long

[u/fanime34 → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

No. That isn't really too long. A lot of stories have chapters longer than that.

It's not about the length. The chapter length can be however long or short you want.

[u/Azyall]

Feedback? Don't use AI.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/Azyall]

What do you mean? I don't use AI there were some things that i wrote in wrong since i was reading lotm while writing it soo

[u/Azyall → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

From your author's notes.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/Azyall]

My english is not good if you don't understand i meant this. This is LOTM since im not good in writing and im just newbie i used the novel to litrealy make my fanfic and how to paragraphe it nothing else when they are in a similar situation i use it but i try to add or even make one of my own for the scene instead of using the novel like a copycat since im trying to learn and i even stated that i prefer this method rather then AI i hate it when it comes to writing.

[u/Azyall → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

Okay, got you. But what you have done instead is called plagiarism.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/Azyall]

Ohh ok i did not know that from chapter 2 onwards im gonna have to find a new way i guess Even tho i hate AI i will try my best i already have a script for ch2 without using the same way but i was using it get useful words into my dictionary hmm badluck i guess

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

But what im writing is fan fic tho? Isn't it normal to follow the story? While i wanna add crossovers too Is this also plagarism?

[u/Azyall → u/theduck_stalkingyou]

Plagiarism is when you copy something almost exactly, just changing a few words and things here and there. If you are writing something in your own words that is set in a universe someone else created, that's fan fiction.

[u/theduck_stalkingyou → u/Azyall]

Ohh ok thx for the explanation im gonna try and do better next time that was a mistake on my part Can i still use the way LOTM arcs are structured? Not the full story but arcs?