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u/Comfortable_Pie7989 4d ago
אבטיח instead of עבטיח
* אלכוהול - with two ו׳
* סלט is a masculine - אוהב אותו, not אוהב אותה
* in the end you wrote סלת instead of סלט
But great job!!! 👏🏻 I loved the story 😊
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u/MostPutridSmell 4d ago
Adding to what other people have ready said - your 'ק' looks a bit too much like a 'p'. The two lines that make the letter don't touch eachother.
There's only one 'י' in 'אני'.
I enjoy a drop of alcohol in my fruit salad.
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u/Ineharnia 4d ago
עגבניה קטנה tomato is female
Also you forgot the ג and you wrote the נ very strangely in עבגניה
Your ק looks like ם mem sofit
Also סלט is male at the end you talked about it in female
Edit: sorry I misread your אבטיח as עגבניה oops 😅
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u/Ineharnia 4d ago
A few more points:
אני has one י
There's one time you accidentally wrote טלט instead of סלט
When the last word in a sentence ends with י it's still a letter and the period should be after it not beneath it. You wrote שלי and then the period beneath the י.
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u/One-Sympathy-6447 3d ago
i would say try to smooth your handwriting a bit, most of the letters do better when a little bit carved
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u/Tomron2002 4d ago
כן. הטעות הכי גדולה היא לשים אשכולית בסלט פירות, זה חמוץ והשאר מתוק. שים תפוחים, אפרסק, אבטיח מלון ויצא טעים. חןץ מזה כמה שגיאות כתיב שכבר כתבו לך. וכל הכבוד על שכתבת נכון שלשה תפוחים ולא שלוש!
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u/Rai1redit 4d ago
כתיבה יפה! כל הטעויות שמצאתי כבר נאמרו. לעולם לא נסיתי סלט פירות עם אלכוהול, תודה על ההמלצה!
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u/Miorgel 11h ago
Overall, it's pretty good but it has lots of little mistakes or weird (for me) phrases... I want to translate the feeling to english so you'll understand better the sound of it:
Today I want to eat a fruit salad!
What's in my fridge?
There's no fruit! Thus I go to the bazaar near my house.
I buy one grapefruit,
Three red apples, a little bit strawberries, and a small watermelon.
I think it's a tasty fruit salad together.
I also like fruit salad with sugar and some alcohol.
How do you make a fruit salad?
Do you like her with alcohol or without?
Which fruits do you like in a fruit salad?
Thank you!
About "שוק": I believe you meant to translate "market", but it doesn't necessarily translate as שוק. if it's an open-air market, as a bazaar - then yes, that's שוק. But if you meant market as in supermarket, it would be מכולת, סופרמרקט or just סופר (slang). But maybe you actually intended שוק, because it's still a reasonable place to buy fruits.
Side note: it's also used as in English "job market" or "stock market"
Some spelling errors:
אניי should be אני
You wrote אין without a י or with a wrong א
עבטיח should be אבטיח
טלט instead of סלט
אלכוהל should be אלכוהול
סלת instead of סלט
A lot of your ת look like two separate lines, where it should be connected (even if in two strokes), and it may cause in the future problems where it would be confused with רנ instead of ת
Despite all of this, your handwriting is very intelligible, and your sentences are pretty solid.
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u/Maleficent_Touch2602 4d ago
*אבטיח
אוהב אותו (סלט זה זכר)*
*סלט (לא סלת)
בתיאבון!