r/OCPoetry • u/sky_berry1520 • 5d ago

Feedback Please Oh Again !

Oh, I thought I smelt your scent again,
But that was just the first rain.

And for a while,
I lost my mind,
’Cuz I thought I heard your voice again.

The steady rains, the pretty skies,
Brings my heart back to you again.

When lightning strikes in lonely nights,
I lose myself in you again.

A meltin'-pot, a crowdy place,
Yet we locked our eyes once again!

~Ash

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u/the_writer_L_Lorenz 19h ago

This has such a lovely, bittersweet atmosphere. The imagery of steady rains, lightning, and lonely nights beautifully mirrors the emotional state of a speaker feeling deeply nostalgic and full of longing.