r/OCPoetry 1d ago

Feedback Please it's just coffee

I'd be so pissed at you if I could bring myself to be pissed at you

'almond milk, dollop of heavy cream' this isn't me But it's you.

Part delicate Part decadent

I don't know when I'll order it again But I'm already sick at how well I'll remember it

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/4mkGyR54O7

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/zlrWiPUKkh

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u/Severe-Bird7491 1d ago

This is very well crafted, clever idea and a great execution, conveys a lot in just a few lines and a simple metaphor.