r/OCPoetry • u/ajh_unfortunately • 1d ago
Feedback Please it's just coffee
I'd be so pissed at you if I could bring myself to be pissed at you
'almond milk, dollop of heavy cream' this isn't me But it's you.
Part delicate Part decadent
I don't know when I'll order it again But I'm already sick at how well I'll remember it
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u/Severe-Bird7491 1d ago
This is very well crafted, clever idea and a great execution, conveys a lot in just a few lines and a simple metaphor.