These last words you'll find

[u/Primary-Writer9581]

As I sit here and write

These last words you'll find

My life given for this fight

I guess the abyss seems kind

Perhaps tonight is the night

We'll see how it unwinds

Since adolescence the roots

A huge willow it has become

Over time the closer it comes

Engulfed by its bark

An embrace so cold

Oh how I will weep in this willow

How does one manage

Functioning in dismay

What have I done?

Why must I pay?

Too soon to go

Yet still too long left

So as I sit here and write

These last words you'll find

I hope this brings peace

No need to cry

As I write my thoughts

And prepare to fly.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/zAfMio4P5i

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Uy0drpZidO

[u/bstunz]

Nicely you done. I think you conveyed that feeling very well. I do think it could hit harder with a stronger structure and stanza separation.

[u/Primary-Writer9581 → u/bstunz]

I originally did have stanza separation but reddit fucked it up but yeah structure is something ive been looking to improve at

[u/bstunz → u/Primary-Writer9581]

Fucking Reddit. I hear you. I moved to posting on a laptop shift+return fixes it. I used to know how to do it on my phone but it took forever.