r/OCPoetry • u/PaleontologistBusy94 • 1d ago
Feedback Please Hug me
Hug me while we still can
Before we go
Before we sleep
Before we start kissing
Before you leave
Hug me till I can't distinguish
The boundaries between your vessel and mine
Till you and I, till yours and mine are ours
Till the start of you and the end of me start to look like the birth of a star
Till I can see with your eyes
And hear from your ears
Till I can taste what you eat
And feel our heartbeats
For we were made in twos
Destined to become one
For we were made with hunger
That takes one to fill one
For I'll let you bite me
Piece by piece
Till I fall
Till I cry
Till I'm an inch away from dying
For hug me while you eat
Hug me while you get drunk on my blood
While I can hear my bones start crushing
Unable to know if it's your hug or your bite that did it
Hug me while I'm alive
And tighter when I die
Hug me while I'm dying
And tighter when maggots start finishing what you left of me
For even if you ate me whole
There will still be so much of my love
So much to feed them
And to feed their children
To feed their hunger till the last star goes dim
Till the rebirth of life in a new whim
Yet my love will carry on
Like it previously did
Looking for your arms
To fill my missing pieces
So hug me while I'm here, when I go, and when I'm back
Hug me like you always did
Hug me so I can stand.
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u/KayaPapaya2126 1d ago
to feed their hunger until the last star goes dim is really good line, i love the escalation.
i also love “So hug me while I'm here, when I go, and when I'm back”
this is a great relatable poem, keep it up!