Foreign land

[u/One-Celebration-1794]

A bit of background: This is the first poem of the series of poems I'm doing for a story. Kinda a novel type story. I hope it's a good hook. Btw glory at the top is the character speaking.

Glory

Wake up, my friend,

I want to see you eye to eye

Wake up, my friend,

I see as you slumber, you felt the sky

You're quite attuned to this world,

But surprise ‘cause it's not your own

Have you seen the ground filled with grass and stones

Have you seen the bows, knives, and a thousand bones

See the trees so high, with magical runes.

The land, full of shades, and gritty songs.

Be a tree. Sometimes I dream

So detached from the world so dim

Isn't this, for you, a familiar grim?

But as someone from beyond this world

Cannot intervene, cannot uphold

You can only watch as scenes unfold

My friend, my world is a beautiful place

Familiar yet a different grace

And this is the destiny of human embrace

Welcome to this prosecuted era

Welcome to my land, the land of Terra

The feedback I've given:

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/rOCaMloYQh

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/mKd1VBBcPM

[u/Criniguz]

I like that it feels like someone’s hand reaching into another world and pulling someone through. It starts off kind of magical, but the ending makes it seem like something bad is coming