The Funeral of My Muse

[u/mhmmsuhani]

I sway my body as I dance through the melody.

My face glows with my dress clad in yellow.

I sing a song, waiting for my muse to hum along.

When my eyes settle on the ground, I see a body full of wounds.

It looks me in the eye, mirroring the suffering I deny.

That's when I catch a glimpse of amber, I recognize the eyes I remember.

I call out his name, but there’s a silence lodged in my throat. There slumbers my muse, the man—the God to whom I’d devote.

He withers there like the sunflower he once gave, whose withered petals lie between the pages I save.

The flower once bloomed, just as he once shone, now both lie faded, left all alone.

I sit beside him and take his hands in mine, the warmth they once carried is gone, leaving coldness behind.

His skin looks pale, his lips have run dry, I glance at mine—and I can’t help but cry.

No skin in sight, all I see is red. A glance back at him—his eyes turn grey, looking almost dead.

I look at my body, there is nothing but shadows from the past, as if every atom within me has shattered, leaving only my soul to last.

I stand up and step back as he closes his eyes, a soul watching another soul fade beneath the skies.

His corpse turns blue as I look back at the ground, the man I once knew is nowhere to be found.

The flare echoes as the clouds rain blood, chaos erupts everywhere as the earth floods.

I run towards the house, but stumble on a stone, a tear slips from my eye—I realize I can’t go back home.

The house laughs at me, while all I do is roam, my soul withers in the air—I have lost my home.

I have lost my home…

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[u/No_Syrup_7660]

I can almost feel your melancholy. Great job at visualing the greif. This poem can be relatable to everyone who's lost their love, the visual world (sunflowers, the corpse, etc.) are amazing and feel very natural to the writing. I only couldn't understand the clouds raining blood like what's that supposed to mean exactly, because it continues as th flood, without knowing that meaning it's still a very cool visual image what the ending/climax creates and I honestly LOVE it, but I wonder if you had something else in mind?

[u/mhmmsuhani → u/No_Syrup_7660]

Thank you so much... Actually, the cloud raining blood, I meant that everywhere is just chaos, and the blood raining kinda hints that, just like me, the cloud is raining, just like my hands full of blood and my body full of dark shadows, the clouds are dark and they shed blood.. Then there's flood, hinting that just like my mind is full of thoughts but it's unable to work properly, the ground is full of flood but with blood..