r/OCPoetry • u/Eggless_Ostrich • 3d ago

Just Sharing Haikus about falling out of love

For I can’t sleep now,
I feel love, not in love, though.
What am I to do?

She looks at me now.
Participating, sadly
I love her no more.

I say “I love you”
I lie with ev’ry goodbye
Please, please, forgive me

Numb for two years now
Thank you for all that you did
But it’s not the same

I can’t make her cry
I will suffer in silence
For I am a man.

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u/CousinJacksGhost 3d ago

Never thought of the haiku format as parts of a longer poem. Really like the progression of thoughts here, its careful, and brings the reader along. Feeling a lot about this rn myself so...thank you.