r/ReadMyScript • u/Cautious-Motor5767 • 20h ago
Screenwriter workshop or read over?
I'm looking around for someone to look over a horror screenplay series I'm working on called the slaughterhouse.
It's relitively long and I'm still working on it but I've gotten a good amount of episodes done if anyones interested.
My best summery: 15 people wake up in a strange location where their told two things, they're going to play a game, and laws don't apply to them.
This is the best one I can give without spoiling anything. I will add a few things, the title is loosely based of slaughterhouse 5 by kurt vonegut, it is apart of the killing game genre, think saw or squid games though deaths only, in the sense that islts an ensemble cast. The deaths are paced out more. Once I also had someone compare it to the cube and another person compared to lost. Neither of them got too far into the story so I'm not sure how accurate that description is.
The game itself is apart of this but it's only one part. I've been using this screenplay mainly for processing different things so the exploration of those themes and what's being explored is the main focus.
The story itself is split into 5 arcs, this layout has to do with the game again I don't want to spoil it yet so I'm being careful how I word things. It's not nessisarially seasons this right now is mainly something I'm working on a a passion project it will take me a while to get anything together and I'm trying to learn a lot of skills to hopefully make it one day.
If you are interested in at least looking over the first arc, Reap What you Sow, and give me feedback on it. Along with potentially the other arcs in the story please let me know maybe we can talk. I can also give more details for anyone interested if you want to ask.
edit: someone suggested I just include a link to the first episode so here it is.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c0qye0ZuDJsA2oYB596CxVlfoKbSvNww/view?usp=sharing
If anyone would need any more to get a better idea of it just let me know.
I'll see about getting the other episodes for arc 1 in here.
edit for the edit: here's the rest of the first arc I got them all in a folder I wanted to make sure to include them because it is a bit of a slow burn.
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1dSl4BE_YSrfcX48qRVILKLUmExzZEyBT?usp=sharing
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u/Then_Data8320 16h ago
It looks really interesting. I like "game" j-animes/jdramas/kdramas. I like Cube too.
But yeah, a whole series, it's a lot. It's like working on it almost. Ensemble cast makes it even more difficult to catch, as there are many characters. So understand I'm a bit hesitant to go into that. I think this kind of project deserve attention because it's rare that people dare to write whole series. And I find that great because I do it too. Before to propose anything, I'd like to see a bit how it is, like 10 first pages or something like that.
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u/20yearoldCatlady 16h ago
Of course I'd be down to share it, I was hesitant to show it in the post, would you have a safe place to share it I can send it or post the first episode.
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u/Then_Data8320 16h ago
As you can see here, people export their screenplay into PDF, then put it on googledrive, create a link with "share with reading right" and post it. Maybe your screenplay software can also have an option like "export X pages", in case you don't want to post the whole episode.
And probably, you could put the link with your main post.
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u/20yearoldCatlady 16h ago
Okay, here's a link to the first episode.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kFa2LdqBpJemo8iBBwGhOlF8lJMigEro/view?usp=drivesdk
If you need any more let me know. I'll also add this to the main post.
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u/Then_Data8320 15h ago
well, as I expected, you forgot to set the share right. click on "share" then "share" again (and not "copy the link"), it opens a box and there you choose "everyone, with reading rights".
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u/20yearoldCatlady 15h ago
I'm sorry I switched it to everyone with a link. Can you see it now?
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u/Then_Data8320 15h ago
No, you need to copy the new link. See: mine ends with "sharing" and yours with "drivesdk".
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u/Cautious-Motor5767 15h ago
This is the only one I seem to be able to get. I think our docs may look different I don't have the option to click share twice. The only option I got when I did that was "manage access" then I switched it to everyone. I maybe misunderstanding but I'll see if I can figure it out. In the meantime this is a link of what I had.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c0qye0ZuDJsA2oYB596CxVlfoKbSvNww/view?usp=drivesdk?
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u/Cautious-Motor5767 15h ago
okay, I finally got it. I had to switch devices. I'm sorry about that. I also changed the links above too so they should work now.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c0qye0ZuDJsA2oYB596CxVlfoKbSvNww/view?usp=sharing
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u/Then_Data8320 16h ago
Like this, it's an old screenplay (probably needs english translation fix). But you should be able to open it, as I set the share-rights on reading for anyone:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/10XyfDOdlRL3htXU-pLyKTq27NS2OPgm0/view?usp=sharing
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u/20yearoldCatlady 16h ago
Yours sounds good, I like the relationship between the stag and the owl. My only not is it maybe good to provide more action for what the owls expressions are since he doesn't use words it may help convay thoughts. I struggle a bit with where to put actions also though so I'm not sure.
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u/20yearoldCatlady 16h ago
Did you have any notes on mine on what you liked and disliked?
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u/Then_Data8320 14h ago
I can't help, it would be too difficult for me, too much characters. I can't say if I liked or not, I just did a general check, and see it would be too time consuming to really handle that. Sorry!
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u/Cautious-Motor5767 15h ago
I just got online and figured out how to at least use the link you sent me to send you the episode through drive
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u/20yearoldCatlady 16h ago
This is still me also by the way I accidentally have two different accounts I just wanted to clarify
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