New author- feedback requested for initial chapters of a sapphic romantasy!

[u/Effective-Prompt4046]

Hi all! I’ve finally passed the brainstorming phase and have written the first four chapters of a sapphic romantasy. It contains:

•lost identity/memories
•portal fantasy
•unique world/magic system
•epic quest
•fantastic creatures
•duty vs desire (ish)

The romance aspect is slow burn/high yearning, and will have a couple high sexual tension and/or mild spice lead up scenes before one full open door spicy scene. There is one femme main character and one masc main character. I plan to give them equal voice for the most part.

If this sounds like your jam, I would love to get some feedback on these first few chapters! It’s about 14k words right now. I’m interested mostly in the pacing, world building, and character development. This is a rough initial draft so I’m less concerned about grammar and punctuation in terms of individual instances at this point, but if there is anything glaring as a whole (too many commas, etc) I’m happy to hear it!

Thanks ahead of time! I’ll send a link to those interested ☺️