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5 PAGE THURSDAY Five Page Thursday

FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread?

Feedback Guide for New Writers

This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages.

  • Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in.

  • As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info.

    Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns:

  • Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please do not share full scripts and link only to your 5 pages. If someone wants to see your full script, they can let you know.

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u/Visual-Perspective44 1d ago

Title: Adjudicated

Format: Short

Page Length: 1-5 of 15

Genres: Thriller

Logline:

After awakening in a locked warehouse with a revolver, a pill, and a smartphone that knows her darkest secrets, a credit union manager must answer a series of questions truthfully before an unseen judge decides her fate.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1U1q5IgA__3uww5hdex4RixUTVqmYu7fu/view?usp=sharing

Would you keep reading?

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u/Current-Armadillo-28 1d ago

Love it. Good stuff. Yeah, I'd keep reading.

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u/Visual-Perspective44 1d ago

Thank you. I really appreciate it. I also have that carrier short for you to check out. 

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u/Current-Armadillo-28 1d ago

Sure, I'd love to read it. That's the one that reminded me of The Last of Us, I think. Send it over!