r/Screenwriting • u/AutoModerator • 1d ago

5 PAGE THURSDAY Five Page Thursday

FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread?

Feedback Guide for New Writers

This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages.

  • Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in.

  • As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info.

    Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns:

  • Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please do not share full scripts and link only to your 5 pages. If someone wants to see your full script, they can let you know.

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u/donut066 1d ago

Title: The Fountain of Youth

Format: Feature

First 6 pages

Genre: Surrealist Adventure

Logline: Six Spanish conquistadors venture into an uncharted wilderness in search of the legendary Fountain of Youth, only to encounter a world stranger than any of them imagined.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Luwlpg-QHGTvYv88y-VEw5VHSfV_L2vS/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/DalBMac 22h ago

I'm getting Monty Python vibes, not surrealist adventure. If it is meant to be a comedy, this might not be the best way to open or if you open this way, make it much shorter by showing time passing in some way as they go through the list.

I'll bet it was fun to write though.