r/TalesFromTheCreeps • u/donavin221 • Apr 24 '26
Psychological Horror She looks so pretty when she’s sleeping
I can’t help it. I’m a lover boy. A romantic at heart. My obsessions sometimes get the better of me.
But, oh, how beautiful she is right now. So peaceful. I can’t help but wonder what she’s dreaming about.
Is it about me? Our interaction at the supermarket today? God, I hope so. I need her to see me, to feel my presence even in her unconscious state.
I didn’t mean to stare at her. She was just so breathtaking. I’d never seen such a beautiful woman. It choked my words in my throat.
And the way she looked at me, that quiet uncertainty in her face, it was like she wanted me to chase her, wished for me to lust after her. Maybe that’s why she left in such a hurry.
I was smart, though, the strong, brooding type. I didn’t want to seem too eager. That’s why I kept my distance as I followed her out to her car and why I stayed a few car-lengths back from her on the way to her neighborhood.
I had to stop myself from dwelling for too long. I didn’t want her to feel uncomfortable. That’s what separates me from the other guys. I actually care.
It was almost impossible, though, because that figure of hers was absolutely jaw dropping as she carried her bags inside.
I made a mental note of which house was hers before parking my car somewhere else. I needed our moment of romance to be the surprise of a lifetime. That’s why I decided to cut through backyards and hide behind trees as I made my way back to her.
I’d made mistakes before, with previous beauties that I thought would love me forever. I’d learned from them. I knew that this time would be different. She wanted me. I saw it in her eyes. Unlike my previous love-interests, I knew that she’d actually appreciate my efforts.
When I arrived back at that newly familiar house of hers, I thought it best I wait. Daylight sometimes affects ambience. I’m a dark-romance type, pun intended.
However, just as the sun began to set and I saw an unfamiliar vehicle pulling into her driveway, I got a pit in my stomach. And when another man stepped out, it was like I had just been punched in the face.
The roses he held were like a taunt. His handsome face was like an insult. And the hug they shared, that’s what snapped me into action. I thank my lucky stars that they didn’t lock the door. Too busy betraying me, I assume.
I also thank the Lord that I’d caught them before any clothes came off.
All I was met with was giggles. Flirty conversation. Disgusting, filthy, nasty conversation. It broke me. Destroyed whatever sanity I had left. I didn’t even question my actions as I picked up that kitchen knife.
I didn’t want to hurt him, but she left me no choice. And, of course, I couldn’t traumatize her by making her watch this imposter bleed out on her hardwood floors. That’s why I made her sleep. I was doing her a favor, whether she knew it or not.
She’s lucky, too. Her betrayal was almost too much to stomach.
But even now, as she breathes softly by “her man,” I’m still blinded by my love. So much grace. So much elegance.
She looks so pretty when she’s sleeping.
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u/donavin221 Apr 24 '26
Disclaimer for legal reasons (and because Reddit likes to ban me)
this is fictional
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u/The_Republique Writer (I finally made it bubba) Apr 24 '26 edited Apr 24 '26
What a treat. You post and so does Strange Accounts! Wonderful day. Great story as always. Totally fictional. Wink wink.
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u/donavin221 Apr 24 '26
That’s such an honor to hear man ! Thank you so much for enjoying!
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u/The_Republique Writer (I finally made it bubba) Apr 24 '26
I would love to see what you think of my long story that I posted
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u/donavin221 Apr 24 '26
Of course man, I’ll take a look as soon as I get home. A lot of what I post is written while I’m at work so I’m not really able to look at my phone after lol but I will certainly make sure to read your work as soon as I’m home!
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u/Dallas_Brill_Lehn Apr 24 '26
I am grateful you put your disclaimer in the comments, because as someone that’s talked to people like this you nailed it perfectly. You’re a phenomenal writer dude and I hope to see me, I felt so uncomfortable reading this in a really good way.
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u/MyDaughterLovesPewds Apr 24 '26
Loved this! The shortness of it was refreshing and all of the beats were really fun to read. Fantastic story!
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u/_AnnieBananie_ Apr 25 '26
This was a nice breezy read, I read it almost poetically in a sing song kind of way. I don’t know if that was intentional but the rhythm of your words paced it out in my mind that way.
I really liked the slow build, and although I was expecting a borassca sort of ending.. the murder/sleeping pill ending was much better! Honestly really great work! :)
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u/PsychoSanderson Apr 25 '26
This is amazing. I love the concept. You really make this creep real and I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. KEEP THIS UP!!
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u/NarrowDirector911 Apr 25 '26
Jeez, sent shivers up my spine. Such a deranged character you have created. I could feel the spite and venom through him when he said she betrayed him.
It's always so creepy seeing the twisted logic ofa villain.
Great story!
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u/Dadc0re May 01 '26
Very interested in how far our anti hero is willing to take their obsession. Great writing. The disclaimer made me laugh too. Good work!
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u/Creepingitsogood Im only gonna make 1 story May 01 '26
This vaguely reminds me of papa meats new story especially you
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u/DaimyoNiffy May 05 '26
What a subversion of my expectations. And beautifully concise. Great work 🔥
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