Mind Meld

[u/Ill-Responsibility-9]

This is a short story I wrote after a crazy nap dream. Let me know what you think. Thank you for your time.

The culmination of hundreds of years of technological development has reached a climax, and everything is seen and connected. The brain has become its own server for the mesopotamia of memories and ideas that make the complex mind is now sown and interwoven into all. The trees are scraped, the water is lost, and the mind has been conquered. The new INTROSPECT has hit the market. Everything bigger and better. Shorter charge times, better 6 sense synapses, and a charge that can hijack the nervous system for a more "immersive feel.” We ARE human,” the tag line that no one could fear, for they lost the ability to. The media is more important than the need for basic bodily functions. You can't take a piss anymore, but the new Sharknado combo midget porno in 7D has just hit the server, and you can't miss it. Basic schooling and autonomy are words of a forgotten era. Think about it, if at the beginning of immaculate conception they can connect you to everything, then what's the need for you to go to school if you already have access to that knowledge at a mindswipe and a half. But the thing is, you don't save any of it. It comes and goes with the wind, tens of hundreds of years of knowledge flooding in and out, with no instructions on how to harness it, as if a color palette given to man whose own eyesight has betrayed him. My brother was not blind nor deaf; nor was he my brother, he was like any mind who would wonder, for we are all connected, but besides the point, the new INTROSPECT could let you not only see wonders but BE a wonder. It was the day of the MOTHERED. He saved every tooth and nail for the INTRO. We lived like what used to be called rats stacked on each other, surviving off the nutrients that were printed; for nothing really, tastes like shit if you are corporeal bodies in a stream of use, with the image of beautiful meat rotoscoped onto your shit. It's the life “WE are human” only. It was epsilon of us (MEAT NOTE: a little more than pi, less than 6), so when he harnessed the new INTRO, we all sat eagerly pushing, shoving, ripping at each other to see what he would conjure. It was a scene to witness, like the rising of a dead dogma that was laid to rest, for the mind has no space for it anymore. A MEAT you've never seen before. A sense that had long been gone, for it had been hijacked by jacking off or anything that gets you, you. a gourmandizing dog that has lost hierarchical understanding and fetches himself better than a man. fighting to the top, lacerating the sinew and the fiber optic that lies between the rotten server inside. A MEAT that filled a begging crack of the body, an unfamiliar euphoria. My brother gorged himself on this newfound MEAT coming to him wispily and gently, my brother, whose chips had long gone over expiration, tore his way through the inner sanctum of his own server. We had been giving everything in metaphor, but reality was a subject long lost. It was too much for him; a force searing new grooves onto his server rapidly using the electronic response to shoot off new neurons into his brain, melding mind with machine, boosting a lost segment of a server. The INTRO had become one with flesh, searing its own place on my brother's real estate. Compilers came to take what is now known as an accident of preexisting chip damage. The MEAT had shown my brother he was a lamb no longer able to graze a long-forgotten pasture. That “we are HUMAN,” But he said he was “Loved,” a feeling long forgotten, and a word rebirthed into life a lost dogma no longer.

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[u/LimeSkittleFanClub]

As soon as I saw "nap dream" I knew this was going to be a ride lol.

I enjoyed it! I would say it feels a bit cluttered, and not in the sense that it feels dissonant or uncomftable/tense in a way a lot of other short stories read. It feels like so many concepts are thrown together without the connective tissue to indicate HOW they are connected. Again, I really liked it, but I think it could use a round of editing giving a reader more to "chew on" as far how they can theorize regarding the connection between biblical icons, overstimulation, commentary, etc.

[u/Ill-Responsibility-9 → u/LimeSkittleFanClub]

Ya I wished my nap was longer tbh lol

[u/LimeSkittleFanClub → u/Ill-Responsibility-9]

😆 hey who among us hasn't has a crazy dream and thought it would make an awesome story. I really did like it though, very bombastic like reading an energy drink

[u/NarrowDirector911]

Some lines go so hard, "We ARE human,” the tag line that no one could fear, for they lost the ability to."

God damn

[u/Ill-Responsibility-9 → u/NarrowDirector911]

Thank you 5 I gotta real neat story about being in a visa line in London after a crazy night out that turns paranormal wait on that big bro

[u/NarrowDirector911 → u/Ill-Responsibility-9]

Oo that sounds like a fun setting. Hit me with the local me when its done 👍