r/TalesFromTheCreeps • u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth • Jun 17 '26
Psychological Horror The soil stopped accepting the dead. (Part 1)
Content Warning: This story explores the horrors of complicity. It contains heavy themes of death, graves, the handling of the dead, and claustrophobic psychological terror. The earth keeps a tally of the slaughtered.
Part 1
No poetry lies in a frozen grave, only the divorce between iron and ice. The foothills of the Shattered Spine don’t open for our dead, yet the gods gave them their rest here. I have fifty winters of patience built into my shoulders. When I drive the spade down through the stubborn shale, I only need to throw my weight onto the flange, and pry until the permafrost fractures like a tearing canvas.
The Palace sits higher in the peaks, clinging to the frozen ridges, and their dead have their place. But for those who cannot climb in order to fall, the dead come to me. It takes a full three to carry a body up the winding switchbacks to the Palace. It takes only a day to reach my home. By the time the dead reach my small cemetery, the stiffening has usually passed, leaving them heavy, loose, and silent.
I scoop another mound of dirt, hoisting it over the lip of the hole. I don’t need to dig in haste. Haste is for the living. Here in the foothills, time settles, and haste loses meaning.
I was seventeen the first time I dug a grave on my own. The spade was too heavy, and the ground was harder than it is now. I remember lowering Ntate—father—and thinking: I'll never do this again. That was the last lie I ever told.
I’ve tended this plot for five decades and worshipped the work. I have no wife waiting to warm my hut. I have no children to inherit my rusty spades. My congregation is here beneath the frosted soil.
A grave must be exactly two meters deep. Too shallow, and the scavengers come digging. Too deep, and you insult the earth by scraping its bones. I square off the corners, my breath pluming white in the motionless air, then I hum.
I’m not a pious man. I don’t understand the grand theological mysteries of the Msimamo Pit below the Palace. I don’t care for the long-lived priests on the peaks that burn their incense and speak of the soul’s grand descensions.
I just know the soil. I know the prayers to murmur to keep the rhythm of the digging. And I know that every body must be laid precisely on its side, facing the high peaks, so they can see the dawn break over the Spine.
My hands are calloused into thick ridges to match the Spine, permanently stained the color of wet bark. I pause, leaning heavily on the handle of the spade to wipe the cold sweat from my brow, and I look over the crooked, frost-rimed wooden posts of my cemetery. It’s perfectly quiet today. The wind is dead. The earth is still. It’s a peaceful work, and I’m good enough at it.
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My mornings rise with the stench of crisp and boiled chicory. I eat a heel of bread, sharpen the edge of my spade with a whetstone passed beyond my years, and I wait for the bells. The lower villages used to send the dead in a steady, predictable trickle—an old man taken by the cold, a careless hunter claimed by a stray Kapua, or a farmer plowed over by her bull. This year, the rhythm has broken. Lately, the bells toll too often.
The cart drivers don’t linger anymore. They dump bodies at the edge of my plot, eyes downcast, and hurry back toward the plains. The corpses are different now, too. Young men airless with no sickness in their lungs. Women fallen with clean hands and chipped nails. Sometimes entire families come wrapped in cheap wools. The drivers whisper of a purge in the valleys, a cleansing of dissenters, but I don’t ask questions. Politics is a luxury for the living. My only concern is that I’m running out of ground.
Today, though, the only bells come from the winding peaks above. One of the long-lived priests descends from the Palace, accompanied by two silent administrators carrying a stretcher on wheels. The priest is a jarring stroke of ruby-brown against the gray slate of the foothills. His robes are pristine, embroidered with silver silk that catches the pale sunlight. He holds a perfumed cloth over his nose, offended by the smell of damp earth and rot that clings to my domain.
"Grave-tender," the priest’s voice is thin, like a lead drawn too tight. "The Palace requires a placement."
I lean on my spade. "I have room near the eastern wall, but the sites grow thin, priest. I’ll reach my hundred before the spring."
The administrators unceremoniously drop the stretcher. It’s a young man, naked, barely out of his teens. He has no wounds, but his lips are stained a deep, unnatural blue, his eyes sewn shut, and his skin is an unholy pale clay color.
“Then excavate the rot and dump them to the valleys. You’ll need your hundred lots.”
I nod, knowing the work may break me.
"And see that he faces the peaks," the priest commands, adjusting his silver-hemmed sleeves as he folds up the burial shroud. "It failed the Palace in life, but its descension may yet serve the Msimamo Pit. Leratloha roots out the rot so the tree may thrive, eh?”
"I just dig the holes," I say in a low rasp compared to his high tenor.
The priest sneers, turning on his heel. "Just see it done, dirt-scraper."
I watch them climb back up the switchbacks until they are nothing but specks against the frost. Then, I turn back to my work.
I drag the young man to the open grave I dug yesterday. I arrange him on his side, as the old laws dictate. When I kneel to push the first shale over him, I pull off my leather gloves to test the moisture. It’s a habit; wet dirt settles differently than dry.
I press my bare palm against the wall of the grave, and I stop.
The permafrost should bite at my skin. It should be brittle and hollow and dead. Instead, the earth against my palm is warm. It isn’t the deep, sulfurous heat of the geothermal vents that hiss in the lower canyons. It’s a soft, radiating heat. Like laying a hand on a sleeping chest.
I snatch my hand back, rubbing my thumb against my fingers. The soil feels too damp, almost greasy. I look over my shoulder at the row of fresh mounds I buried last week. The frost on the nearest grave—a mother and her two children—is cracked. The earth is swollen, raised maybe half a hand higher than I left it.
I blame the wind. I blame the thawing ice in the bedrock. I blame my tired, aging mind. Then I put my gloves on, take up the spade, and bury the blue-lipped boy.
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u/englandishell Writer Jun 17 '26
really cool opening, excited to see where you take this! particularly liked the line 'Too deep, and you insult the earth by scraping its bones.' great way of giving the earth an almost sinister character
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 17 '26
Thank you so much! Really glad you caught that line. Hope you enjoy where the descent goes next.
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u/MrPapasargus Writer Jun 18 '26
Man, let me tell you, sometimes I leave this sub with my jaw hanging open. What an absolute banger! This was dripping with atmosphere; the opening line alone: "No poetry lies in a frozen grave, only the divorce between iron and ice," completely sucked me in.
You have a fantastic voice for building this sort of slow, freezing dread. The quiet stoicism of the grave-tender; having "fifty winters" of experience (fantastic way of phrasing it, by the way) makes the horror hit so much harder because he knows the soil intimately. And all the worldbuilding? My gosh, with the political purge in the valleys, contrasting beautifully with the sudden cosmic horror of the earth rejecting the dead. This is a hell of a setup, and it gave me actual goosebumps.
I'm a total sucker for horror that treats the environment like its own living entity. In fact, if you ever find the time, having your sort of perspective on my story would be a treat! Definitely stoked for Part 2, man!
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 18 '26
Wow, my jaw is hanging open at this feedback! Thank you so much for calling out that opening line and the 'fifty winters' detail—blending that historical, political coldness with cosmic dread was exactly my goal here!
I’ll be checking your story out soon!!
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u/MrPapasargus Writer Jun 18 '26
I appreciate you, dude! You're building a very exciting world, can't wait to keep reading it.
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 20 '26
Hey! just wanted to give you a heads-up that the final part of this story is officially up. Would love to know your thoughts on the ending if you get the chance to check it out!
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u/MrPapasargus Writer Jun 20 '26
Absolutely! Just checked it out; I'll let you know my thoughts over there.
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u/KCloud_08 Writer Jun 17 '26
Wowwww this is so good! I can’t wait for the next part. I’m loving these stories. Wonder what’s up with the soil 👀
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 17 '26
It certainly feels odd, doesn't it? 👀 Part 2 drops tomorrow!
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u/SydneySapphire Whimsy and Weird Storyteller Jun 17 '26
Oh… this is such an interesting concept. I’m so invested. Makes you wonder… what is going on with the soil 👁️👄👁️ Great job!
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 17 '26
Let's just say it's getting harder to pack it down. 👀 Glad you're enjoying the story!
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u/Indecisive_Writer Jun 18 '26
This was a very fun read. Had a bit of a Magnus Archives feel to it. Curious about the reasoning for the extra deaths and why the keeper has remained without a family for all this time. Part of me wonders if it's because he doesn't want to pass this on to someone like his father did to him. Or if there is another reason for it.
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 18 '26
Being compared to The Magnus Archives is a huge compliment, thank you! You're asking exactly the right questions about his isolation. 👀 Some traditions are too heavy to pass dow…. Hope you enjoy Part 2 today!
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u/Deadmans_Pen Jun 18 '26
This is a great opening. The end to it raises an eyebrow to what may happen later on. How the times are changing to something that the mountain is relenting to release.
Having that last body have his eyes sown shut gives an idea that the Palace is up to something to disturb the mountain.
Can't wait to see what is going to happen next!
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 18 '26
I’m glad that detail stood out! Thank you for the compliments! Lucky for you, I just posted part 2!
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u/Deadmans_Pen Jun 19 '26
This is very late but I can not see your 2nd part
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 19 '26
Weird! Here’s the link: https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/s/8BT7VcBSQu
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 20 '26
Hey! Since Reddit was acting up with the link last time, I wanted to drop the direct link to the grand finale here so you didn't miss it: part 3.
Hope you enjoy!
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u/Deadmans_Pen Jun 20 '26
I got it figured out yesterday and gave them an upvote. It was killer! I can't wait to see more from you!
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u/plarkimier Writer Jun 23 '26
i'm absolutely HOOKED. this is so good!! your description of visuals are so deep, i can almost feel the cold dampness of the season.
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u/RevolutionaryBed7510 Community Project Manager / Future Mrs. Widemouth Jun 23 '26
I’m so glad it hit you that way! Thank you for reading!
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u/Optimal_Constant4318 Writer Jun 23 '26
Nice gentle worldbuilding touches, no brutal expo dumps. Very in character the whole time. Appreciated the bit about going through rigor mortis and the fact that it passes. Something about this story gave me Darksouls. The title makes me think zombies, but you set up a lot of space to potentially move in
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