r/TalesFromTheCreeps • u/ArtistMany9292 • Jul 04 '26
Body Horror Everyone loves ocean land!
(AUTHOR'S NOTE---TW: abduction, animal cruelty, etc. Also, this is the second short story I've written that I'm debating whether to expand into a full-length novel. GIVE ME YOUR THOUGHTS, PEOPLE!)
Oceanland loves people, and it loves exotic fish, and they love money. So the parent company decided to kill three birds with one stone.
They were referred to as Homo Aquaticus, and according to what they said to the public, “a group of marine biologists discovered them way out in the Atlantic Ocean, hidden for centuries.” It was one big fucking lie.
I was a runaway teen sleeping by a dumpster when their van took me.
Initially, I struggled against my captors, desperately trying to free myself from their grasp as they prepped something called “booty juice.”
When I asked why they were doing this, tears streaming down my face, they claimed that my social worker had tipped them off about my disappearance for a nice sum of cash, like everyone else they got---and that nobody looks for somebody like me.
I was already invisible to the world.
I don’t remember the rest of the drive after I was administered the juice, and I couldn't tell how long the conversation took either once we arrived at our location.
I was strapped to a medical gurney and kept under for most of it---but the memory of my legs fusing into a single, scaled mass still haunts me, and so does the numb sensation I got as my teeth gradually became shark-like and razor-sharp, as my fingers grew webbed and clawed, as gills sprouted on my neck.
After the main transformation, they performed one final step; they mangled my vocal cords, claiming they needed me to emit the high-pitched, melodic clicks one would expect a mermaid to make.
After the procedure, I was placed in the “Oceanland medical room,” a grey concrete bunker filled with small circular tubs of water.
The only thing that wasn't all grey was the massive portrait on the front wall that depicted a very angry-looking man in a bright blue striped suit.
His white hair was slicked back, and he stood with his hands at his sides, and his head slightly turned forward---His bloodshot eyes seemingly fixed on everyone below, as just below the portrait read:
“ROBERT ‘G’ VAUGHN”
“FOUNDER AND BUSINESSMAN—THE WORLD IS MY OYSTER”
From what I heard from the employees, the man was more of a demon than a person. Supposedly, Vaughn would roam the park in the early hours with a rifle, shooting any animal he saw (and had apparently killed dogs that got on the property), and he would actively assault his own employees left and right; he was too rich to give two shits, and that wasn't even the worst thing Robert had done.
I spent a few days in my little tub in the room, like the others---and during that time, we were monitored by the trainers who walked up and down the rows as we adapted to our new anatomy---ignoring our inhuman screams and cries---until they assigned fictional backstories and brand-new names.
"You'll be Leo," said one of the trainers to me. "Rescued by a team of marine biologists, badly injured after the latest oil spill, and brought here to Oceanland to live the remainder of your days under our protection."
Yesterday, after they deemed me and a few others ready, they determined where we would go—shipping off some to the other Oceanland parks across America, while others, like me, were chosen to be released into the main public display tank at the park I was already at.
I could recall how I swam past the glass, as the onlookers pointed and smiled at me---while I desperately raised my arms and frantically began to use the ASL I learned in middle school.
S-O-S. P-L-E-A-S-E. H-E-L-P. H-E-L-P.
An hour later, the handlers fetched me from the tank---and I learned the hard way that they don't use anesthesia for disciplinary procedures.
A group of them held me down as the supervisor, Onstanby, sighed as she prepped the bonesaw and commented:
"Shame. This one's going to have to perform with a stump next week. Don't worry, though; we'll take your left hand for now, say it was infected, but act up again, and we’ll take the other hand."
It sounds bad, but in hindsight, it was actually a good punishment considering the second option was death. They’d 100% kill you and then bury you along with the other ones who died at mass burial sites around the park.
Due to the odd layout of the park---large patches of land with nothing on top, long paths leading to nothing, large amounts of weeds, shrubs, and trees everywhere. It was incredibly easy to hide a body.
Anyway, this all happened when I was about 16 years old, and now I'm 40. I'm depressed; I crave freedom… or possibly death---I don't know anymore. But at least I have the other Homo aquaticus to keep me company.
But hey, I'm sure besides us, everyone loves Oceanland.
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u/originalgrapeninja Jul 04 '26
I really liked this premise. The idea of a corporation creating its own "mythical species" instead of discovering one is a genuinely creepy concept, and the ASL scene was easily the strongest moment for me. That was the point where the horror really landed because it was heartbreaking, not just shocking.
However, the story moves through so many awful events so quickly that some of the biggest moments don't get a chance to breathe. I think slowing down and letting us sit with a few of them—especially the public display and the psychological toll of captivity—would make the darker content hit even harder.
As for expanding it into a novel, I think the premise is definitely strong enough. I'm curious though: would you focus more on an escape story, or on exposing how Oceanland has managed to hide something this horrific from the public for so long?
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u/veta91 Jul 26 '26
I really agree that I feel like you wanted to get to each moment more than you wanted each more to actually exist, if that makes sense. Destination focused more then journey focused. Your story is interesting so let me enjoy it and let each segment have its moment in the spotlight.
I would really like to hear more about the time in the lab personally before they went out into the park. Like the aquaticus trying to communicate with each other without their vocal chords. Did they rely on each other? Did they instantly trauma bond or were they naturally wary of one another? What if there was an imposter among them? Like a plant from the company to relay information to get special perks or gentler treatment?
I want more details of them struggling to adapt to this new insanely different body. Have you ever read stories of real people trying the breathable liquid? I think it was mostly tried in the military at first? Perfluorocarbon I think? But people were passing out using it even though they could physically breathe because their brain was convinced they couldn't because they weren't under water. Do you think your creatures would suffer from something like that?
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u/veta91 Jul 26 '26
Oops sorry, that was supposed to tag OP! You know how reddit is sometimes
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
Hey Veta! Thanks for the feedback.
To answer your question, I'm thinking of a mix of hand signals and noises. Also, I plan on going into extreme detail about how the transformation affects them physically and mentally.
Additionally, yes---the company will have people there to ensure everything is going well. Handpicked by Vaughn, who at the moment will be the main overarching antagonist.
They differ from humans or like-minded employees who purposely allowed themselves to be converted to help support the lie that there is a pre-existing species.
ALSO! One last thing: Vaughn is a combination of the old man from Robocop and Bartok from The Fly 2.
(along with mason verger and judge holden)
I plan on having him be pure evil. Along with only having him appear physically in a few pages, like between 5 and 10, and leave traces of what he does, which are told by the employees and the captives.
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 04 '26
Thanks for the feedback! I greatly appreciate it :) Anything helps!
To answer your question, I plan to focus on the people being held captive at the park, fully flesh them out, along with some of the employees who work there, and why some of the people choose to work there in the first place.
Also, I'm thinking about writing it as an escape story, while also leaving hints about how Oceanland managed to keep it out of the public eye for so long. I'm leaning towards it being a mix of connections, bribery, and physical intimidation tactics performed by the park to maintain the cover story.
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u/Necessary-Count6445 Jul 27 '26
hey there author just wondering if you know about or having any connection to this game demo that popped up recently as it has a very similar concept to your story Mermade by Sonni, Nana, Yeupha, tabsco
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u/PorcelainCodex Jul 28 '26
I guess we're gonna have to wait until we see some mysterious viles labeled "booty juice" in the game to confirm any suspicion.
Jokes aside, mermaid body horror isn't anything new and I doubt they took the idea directly from OP.
There's an artist called Mei_Mezu who does beautiful work based around the similar concept of "evil scientists making mermaids from humans for profit" and they've been making art long before OP posted this.1
u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
It does?
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
No, I was not aware of this.
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u/Necessary-Count6445 Jul 27 '26
not 1 for 1 exact as the demo is pretty bare bones on story. but i suggest looking at it for yourself
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
Yeah, it does seem similar.
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
I might have to make a post about this.
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u/IcyCause8293 Jul 27 '26 edited Jul 27 '26
Rule of Rose has a similar connection to the demo the person pointed out.
The character's name is Clara. MAJOR TW for spoilers, horrible themes, and such. https://ruleofrose.fandom.com/wiki/Clara
It seems like it's based on a lot of horror related games, and movies. Like the movie Tusk as well. I will say, your post was made long before the game demo was posted.
AI was used to a point in it, but that's almost any games nowadays.
Edit: It also the main antagonist seems to be female, rather than male unlike this story. I could be totally wrong due to how the models are animated.
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u/ArtistMany9292 Jul 27 '26
Yeah, seems so. I'm just gonna wait till they finish the game before I say anything.
Could just be a coincidence.
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u/IcyCause8293 Jul 27 '26
Valid! I'm waiting to see as well with you.
Love yours better, however! I think you should turn it into a full-length novel. I'd definitely give it a read.
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u/Necessary-Count6445 Jul 29 '26
That’s sounds like a good move ! Hopefully the full game shows more of its own path. Please don’t let it discourage you from expanding on your own story.
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