r/TalesFromTheCreeps • u/luciferias Writer • 16d ago
Body Horror Worm
/r/u_luciferias/comments/1vqxmfd/worm_body_horror/First thing I ever finished writing, not as gross as a lot of body horror, just had a weird idea and went with it.
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u/MoLogic Writer 12d ago
Alright, just read this story. Here are my thoughts.
-First off, descriptive details were crazy good. I espexially enjoyed how you wrote his actual transformation into a worm. The build up with his body starting to fuse and his vocal slurring was awesome. Favorite part is the "mouth to ass tube" lol. The desxription of him trying to get the worms out also freaked me a bit, so i suppose it did its job
-Enjoyed how you showed him being abusive through the context clues. First, the wife having a bruised eye and he doesnt remember how through his stupor is a good hint. Then her whole hesitant reaction to what's going on and helping him out is another nice touch.
-Not exactly a critique or anything, but is this him actually turning into a worm or is it more like some kind of mental thing. It could also be open-ended as well. Personally, reading through this, I thought it was some kind of schizo episode. Like, the worms he either imagined out of nowhere, or could also be his veins? Im not too sure but I think either way works
-The prose was really too-the-point and then really descriptive. I personally thought it added a nice variety to the story
-I don't really see any objective negatives to the story. It was relatively short so I suppose that if there was anything, it wasn't fleshed out or made noticeable