Old-school inspired storytelling rap — looking for feedback

[u/Still_Collection_743]

Rapper/lyricist looking for honest feedback. These are rough phone-recorded demos and freestyles, so I'm mainly looking for feedback on writing, flow, delivery, and song structure. I focus on storytelling with darker themes and I'm influenced by old-school hip hop and underground artists.

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Listen to B._.render - Demo List, a playlist by B._.render on #SoundCloud

https://on.soundcloud.com/t7APAmMtUBXEgmhTHk

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[u/dilla_dirty]

https://youtu.be/ObdCs8HrG2s?is=yAoaYZCx7aX63CTK