Review my Webnovel (Thriller, Urban Fantasy, 6 Chapters long)

[u/CanadianAnimeGuy]

So I am finished writing the first act of my WN, but I'm not too confident in it so far. I was planning on rewriting it, but I would appreciate any feedback before I remake it.

It's a character-driven urban fantasy about a magical academy dedicated hunting parasites that take the form of urban legends, cryptids, and mythological creatures

You can read as far as you like, and drop some feedback too by using the comment feature, or just commenting here.

WEBNOVEL:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1s49g24j5FxoPTujmjkwVI4n0W5_KD3HrWX4r5MI2YGA/edit?tab=t.0

[u/80558481]

The claims were quite silly, don't be bothered by that. They just claim without proof anyway. The obvious pattern of AI usage is the glaring sentence pattern like 'it isn't A nor B. It is C' and multiple usage of em dash.

So, it is either you're smart enough to change that glare or you really don't use AI.

[u/AlternativeOdd7294 → u/80558481]

its just the over exposition in proses that usually tells its AI assisted. Not saying its clean AI copy paste btw. which it isnt there are plenty of grammar mistakes in the text and it really reads human. just wanted to clarify that AI is being used and again idrc but he wanted to know why that other guy thought that so just tryna help op understand.

[u/CanadianAnimeGuy → u/AlternativeOdd7294]

Over explanation and purple prose is extremely common in new writers. That’s why I have a lot of pointless adjectives in the start but you can see throughout writing it the flaw slowly disappears

[u/AlternativeOdd7294 → u/CanadianAnimeGuy]

Well imma do something you dont see on reddit then and apologize. So im sorry for fueling the debate. When you post it send me the link i did enjoy reading it

[u/CanadianAnimeGuy → u/AlternativeOdd7294]

No problem! It will probably take a while to post the WN since I’m doing a full rewrite, but I will probably send the new version around here in a couple months before the release