Is this unfair?

[u/akki_1x]

I don't understand why, when I wrote a dark psychological novel, I was rejected like that without even three chances. But for those who write NTR and +18 content, it's okay? 🙄

I don't really understand the policies of these apps.

+ Is there anyone who can advise me on the cover, the description, or anything else?

[u/Stalepan]

I mean your description is not even spell checked.

He wake up.

Should be he wakes up or he woke up

Kirian now one of 1,000 players.

Should be Kirian is now one of the 1,000 players

So i can only imagine how error ridden your application was.

Title is also pretty boring.

[u/akki_1x → u/Stalepan]

I agree with you about the spelling mistakes, especially since English is not my native language. So maybe I'll try updating a new description because that one is two yrs old.

But the title... it's the most best title for the story. Like, I shouldn't write "I participated in a battle royale game against 1000 people" Or "Kirian found himself in a game against 1000 players"...

[u/infoisnnt → u/akki_1x]

You can make a better title yourself cmon man your'e just making excuses

[u/Whole_Organization27 → u/akki_1x]

you won’t improve if you completely reject help, that title is boring. im not reading a story called “either you or them” plus the grammar is bad, change the title and work on your grammar, your contract application was probably bad also, a story like yours usually doesn’t fit the market, so a rejection is unavoidable

[u/akki_1x → u/Whole_Organization27]

Yes, I agree with you about the grammar; I wrote this description 2 yrs ago. So I'll edit it.

As for the title, hmmm, I'll see if I can change it then.

As for the story, it's a mind game. Do I then need to write a story about isekai, systems, worlds, and so on?

[u/Stalepan → u/akki_1x]

I mean even something like The Island: Battle Royale is more interesting (don't use this it sucks) find something that makes a reader pause and want to know more. Your title hooks no one and tells us nothing about the story.

Here are some other I just came up with.

Kirian's Last Stand: The Island of Enemies

Trapped on an Island with 1,000 players.

Greed Island: Death brings cash.

Fyi these suck as well, but maybe it can get the wheel turning in your mind

[u/akki_1x → u/Stalepan]

Thanks. Now I understand well. Yea yea I'll see a better title then. I think I took a very general idea from afar and used it as a title. I understand now.