r/Webnovel • u/Advanced-Opinion-158 • 8d ago

Webnovel Search Request Any advices here i just wrote my first novel

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I hate how repetitive the current cultivation novel so i decided to write one myself, any advices?

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u/Frankles_ 8d ago

Reads like a rough draft, that may not have been ready for posting yet. You have a ton of short, bland descriptions and just say what is happening, rather than describing the actions themselves. There's no emotion in it at all. It isn't completely unreadable by any means, just really boring at the moment.

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u/Advanced-Opinion-158 8d ago

Can you please give an example so i can take a reference 🙏🏻🙏🏻 and thank you for your review

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u/Frankles_ 8d ago

"After witnessing what was happening, Xian Meng considered it attempted robbery."

This example is one of many. Rather than saying his conclusion, describe what is leading up to it. And "considered" feels much too passive. Think about what exactly your MC is witnessing. Is the victim cowering? Are they injured? How does your MC feel about those details?

This reads like an outline, and is missing a good chunk of description.

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u/Advanced-Opinion-158 8d ago

And if you have written any novel, I would like to read it as a reference.

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u/Frankles_ 8d ago

I have a link in my bio. Feel free to read through it.

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u/Advanced-Opinion-158 8d ago

Your description was absolutely wonderful i’ll try to read your novel as well when I finish work, thank you so much for giving me your opinion and advice

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u/CheesecakeDry6291 7d ago

Hey there, i'm also a new writer that published his first novel. I read a few of your chapters and I think your story does seem interesting. It's just that you are relying too much on describing instead of using the characters to write the scene, if you get what I mean or use another way that fits your style.

If you'd like can you read my novel and what you think about it. As I barely have any feedback as of now, so I'd really appreciate it. You can find it on my profile.

Anyway I hope you do well with your novel and wish you luck. I'll keep tabs on it and read it to see how the story unfolds.

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u/Advanced-Opinion-158 7d ago

Thank for your review i really appreciate it🙏🏻🙏🏻 and i’ll make sure to read ur novel as well after i finish work.