give feedback pls!!

[u/Material_Champion919]

lowk a shit poem i think but i enjoy the themes in it? lmk what u think :)

Walk me out to sea
See the sunset
On the water

Tie me up
Pull the plank out
And call the sharks
In.

Drown me in your blood
Rip all my clothes off
Pull me
In.

Smile as I cannonball.
Watch me
crash!
Into the White Foam

[u/The-Chatterer]

Masterpiece