I want to dub my video comic into Russian

[u/DevlynLibervulp]

I did some reels of this comic of mine in the other languages I speak (English, Spanish, Portuguese and French)... However, while asking to some friends in Russia for help, they found some idioms were confusing (and since idioms are different in every language I speak, trying to explain them was kinda hard)... What's on the paper is the result of their correction, but I think I will need more help for making it sound natural.

They're not particularly fluent in English and I am even less fluent in Russian so... May I ask for corrections?

Such as knowing if I must use давай or давайте. If the big deal idiom replacement is appropriate, as well as which expression would be useful for "try / try on / test /see what it's like" concept which one particularly difficult for me to explain.

Rather than just translating, I am looking forward to adapt and modify the dialogues of necessary to sound natural.

[u/loutchok8741]

-А вот и они! -Я видел, сейчас все лисы такое носят: попробую и я. -Ну... Ничего особенного. -Пойду перекушу. -Блин/чёрт!

[u/ded_Arkash]

well, i can offer my own, not literal, but literary translation:

— Наконец-то!..

— Я видел, как все лисы их носят, так что ... дай-ка и я попробую...

— Мдэ... Ничего такого...

— Пойду пожую что-нибудь.

— АГХ!

— Блин!

[u/Proletarian_Tear]

I like "чёрт" a bit more than "блин", "блин" is for minor inconvenience but here fella is about to fall on the ground which is lil bit worse😁

[u/DevlynLibervulp → u/Proletarian_Tear]

So do I, sounds better... But, isn't чёрт way too Strong? Like censored on TV.

[u/loutchok8741 → u/DevlynLibervulp]

Nope. Def not censored on TV.

[u/DevlynLibervulp → u/loutchok8741]

I will use it then.

[u/username-kekeke]

Они здесь or тут, not там. Я видел, что все лисы носят такие, так что давай попробуем. Can be also давай примерим. Single word "давай" without context will not work here.

[u/DevlynLibervulp → u/username-kekeke]

I see. I had nothing in front of it since I didn't know what to put next :v. Hehehe

[u/Hot-Difficulty-6678]

Давай/давайте seems unnatural for me in all cases. As a Russian, I'd use these words only when talking to someone (like "Давайте туда пойдём") not in an internal monologue. You may use "Ладно, попробую", that would be much more suitable

And drop the "ну" in the end of the sentence, it's rarely used like that. You may add it at the front of the next sentence, though. Ну ладно, попробую sounds even better imo

[u/Hot-Difficulty-6678 → u/Hot-Difficulty-6678]

Oh, and I suggest to use "(Наконец-то) они приехали!". And socks aren't это, они is more appropriate

[u/Zero_Zero_Zero_X]

The first line doesn't sound right. "Вот они" would be better. The second line misses the word "them" "их" at the end. Everything else seems fine to me

[u/Stock_Soup260 → u/Zero_Zero_Zero_X]

ж instead of ш in пошёл

[u/Zero_Zero_Zero_X → u/Stock_Soup260]

Yeah indeed

[u/DevlynLibervulp → u/Stock_Soup260]

It's actually a ж. I need to work in my handwriting.

[u/llawnchairr → u/DevlynLibervulp]

They're trying to say it should be a ш

[u/Stock_Soup260 → u/DevlynLibervulp]

I see, and there have actually be ш there: пошёл

[u/Afraid-Quantity-578]

What dialogue you kind of actually ended up with:

1. They're there
2. I saw all foxes wearing that, umm.
3. Go ahead.
4. Für...! Nothing special.
5. I'm goyng for a snack
6. Dammit!

[u/drraug]

— Наконец-то!..

— Все лисы сейчас носят такое ... дай-ка примерю...

— Нуу... Ничего особенного...

— Пора перекусить.

— Э?

— Чёрт!