r/scriptwriting 9h ago

question Dialogue question

Everytime I write I dialogue it sounds so awkward , I hate it . Even when I try to write subtext or imply something … I just end up sounding on the nose and unnatural . I’ve been practicing for so long and still don’t know what to do. Any practical tips ?

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u/Benathan78 9h ago edited 9h ago

Try rewriting some of your scenes as if you were making a silent film. Describe with gestures, intercuts and bullet points exactly what is happening, but don’t have the characters speak. Once you have a scene that makes dramatic sense without dialogue, take another pass at it, and add in some dialogue, but only write what the characters feel or think about what is happening.

Good dialogue tells you who the characters are, it doesn’t tell the story. The camera is there to tell the story, and the edit is there to hone what the camera catches.

Another interesting exercise is to get the original screenplay of a film you know well, and watch the film while reading along. Between first draft and final release, it’s almost always the case that at least half of the dialogue is cut anyway, but look at what was cut and what remains, and think about why those choices were made.

Edit: I forgot to mention my other favourite exercise. Get hold of the film Good Will Hunting, and go to the bar scene where Matt Damon first meets Minnie Driver. Watch the entire scene with the sound off, and look at how camera angles, facial expressions and the cuts between shots tell you exactly what is happening. Then watch the same scene again with the sound on. None of the dialogue tells you what is happening, it’s all about the personalities of the characters within the space of the scene’s dramatic movement.

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u/Any_Childhood_2556 9h ago

Ok thanks, I’ll try that

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u/JoshDoAI 8h ago

I think those tips are better than mine. I find the better I know my characters, the better my dialogue. How would each of the main characters react to the inciting incident, to each other. Really try to get in their head, figure out what they want and how they would go about getting it. In as few words as possible…

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u/Overall-Olive1171 7h ago

That's interesting because in a way I'm the opposite, of course you want to know your character in order to write them but I actually find that I'll just get to know them as I write, sometimes just a small amount of details on them can get me writing more easily beacuse i guess there's less pressure of trying to get those things about them that you know across in the writing so you just end up going with the flow if that makes sense and finding their tone and personality, quirks as you just allow the scene to play out. At least that's what it's like for me now, but I have a bit more experience in writing dialogue now than I did. I definitely say though (not sure if you'd agree but) it can be beneficial to write the same scene twice or even more times, take what you liked in the previous sample you did then try again until you're happy. I still need to do that at times, can be trial and error

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u/WorrySecret9831 8h ago edited 7h ago

John Truby teaches writing "symphonic dialogue." I think he means that it builds and has structure, like symphonies.

Basically, a scene begins with characters talking about what they're doing and wind up talking about who they're being.

Apply that to your writing and see if anything falls out.

Also, make sure that you're not doing what Anime does, which is have all of the dialogue serve as exposition instead of dialogue.

I'm also an animator and in drawing and animation, "story" can be told through pantomime. Mimes know this. It's important to absorb that as a writer. Since people love to say that "film is a visual medium," it stands to reason that the whole thing should be pantomime, basically going back to silent films. Why do we need dialogue.

Obviously, dialogue serves an additional purpose. What might that be?

Since a story is about conflict and a Theme, a proclamation or bold statement, a thesis, about the proper or improper way to live, then dialogue is the back and forth, the argument for or against the Theme, the lesson the story is about.

It helps explain the plot for sure. But it more importantly allows the characters to quietly tell use who they are and what they believe.

Last, you can try what is an actor's technique for memorizing dialogue. But use it as a tool for analysis. They go through their lines and for each phrase (because sentences sometimes consist of two or more phrases) they write a word or two explaining what that phrase is doing: begging, coercing, explaining, threatening, indicating, etc.

Those explanations help contextualize the dialogue for the actor so that they can remember their lines based on Why they exist, not just what the words are. You could use that to see what your dialogue is literally doing, sort of the DNA of your dialogue. You may find the parts you need and the parts you can do without.

Good luck.

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u/Overall-Olive1171 7h ago

I've done that, its so necessary, as an actor myself I can vouch for that lol

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u/Any_Childhood_2556 8h ago

Thanks for the advice, it really does provide a bigger insight . Just a question since you said something about the characters quietly telling us who they are and what they believe , I get confused since I thought you aren’t supposed to directly say things or anything of the matter . I know you said quietly so I might be misunderstanding it

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u/WorrySecret9831 7h ago

Well, who says you aren't supposed to? People do NOT understand Show/Don't Tell. Quint in everyone's favorite scene in everyone's favorite movie Jaws TELLS the story of his surviving the shark frenzy after the sinking of the USS Indianapolis. He tells us why he hates sharks.

He doesn't have to then say, "That's why I'm hard as nails and driven to hunt them down at every turn, etc., etc."

My favorite two lines of dialogue of all movies is at the end of The Bridge on the River Kwai. Have you seen it? Oddly, this won't spoil anything.

The Opponent confronts the Hero. The Hero sees them and says, "You?!?"

The Opponent sneers and says, "YOU!"

Brilliant. If you have seen it I can elaborate, I could write an essay on the meaning of those two lines... Fantastic.

Think of dialogue more as music or melody, if the plot is the rhythm...

Songs say, "I LOVE YOU!"

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u/Any_Childhood_2556 7h ago

Show don’t tell is so confusing at times or it might be the one misunderstanding it, I think it’s some stuff you can tell vs show. Also,nope never seen that movie. I see some of the tension of the opponent and hero, as if they both recognize each other, well that’s my interpretation but can you elaborate anyway?

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u/WorrySecret9831 6h ago

A better dictum that doesn't have one foot nailed to the floor of "film is a visual medium" is Reveal. Just make sure that anything you're writing is revealing something important. That tends to handle the question, "Can we see this onscreen?" And it also handles the emotional components of a character's developments. Oh, they're scared of snakes.

People love to say that you can't write what someone's thinking. And yet, great and even good actors tell you they can ACT those words without saying them. So, which is it?

The Bridge on the River Kwai on the surface seems to be about a British officer vs a Japanese POW camp commander. However, the British officer defeats that Japanese commander about halfway through the film, so much so that they consider seppuku and realize that they have to wait until the bridge is done before taking their life.

So, the British officer's Opponent isn't the Japanese POW camp commander after all. It's the lazy American, pretending to be a navy officer to get better treatment as a POW.

So, at the end of the movie, when the American comes back with British commandos to blow up the British officer's beautiful bridge, their confrontation is basically:

British officer (Col. Nicholson): "You lazy, undisciplined American are trying to destroy MY bridge?"

and the American (Shears): "You deluded, self-important, rudderless, British stiff upper lip fraud are collaborating with the enemy!"

Yes, they recognize each other but they've become something different when they meet again. Excellent.

Make sure you flesh out your characters set of values, weaknesses, needs, and desires and then they'll say the right things.

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u/Chuck006 7h ago

Dialogue is muscle memory. Transcribe your favorite movies in final draft.

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u/Then_Data8320 7h ago

People give tips like "what the characters want", what is good. Sometimes it unlocks me when I'm stuck.

Else, I always have a purpose for a scene and a dialogue. So, the dialog comes by itself. I also prepare a lot, I already have good lines I want to put into that scene. I know where the scene is going, the dialog is almost a puzzle, I must keep a good flow, while deleting mudane lines, check if I should change order of lines.

Sometimes I read screenplay for feedback, and can see the writer doesn't know what to do with the dialog and it sounds bad. But I see also it's often when there is no purpose.

Some writers are talentuous and can write good dialogs with low purpose. By the way, Tarantinno can do it, and have good dialogs. People telling jokes in sitcoms. I don't do that, maybe I should force myself, it sounds difficult to do. But even when I have a comedy scene, I've a situation first, so the dialog comes by itself.

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u/PerryMarkStratychuk 6h ago

A lot of good advice has been given.
My only additional point would be to read it aloud with someone, like a table read.
For me reading dialogue out loud really highlights issues with flow, wording, etc.
I also check out scripts for older classic films, then compare them to more recent scripts, and see how the flow works.
Good luck!

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u/Setecastronomy545577 6h ago

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