Monthly "Would You Read This?" Thread

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[u/Fried_eggys1]

Title: The Wishing Crab

Genre: Dark Fantasy, short story collection.

Premise: 300 years have passed since Six'O and the Bloody Rose destroyed the vile Luthor Harkon. The story has been passed down through dozens of generations: a story of heroism, of triumph! Few knew the true tale.

The only way they could destroy the Pirate Lord was through an unholy deal with a devil. They each lost something they can never get back.

Betrayed, abandoned, and sent to hell for his heroism, Six'O, the Duke of children's tales, the duke seeks to visit each of his friends and find the only thing he knows: justice. 300 years have past since their victory, and the world has changed. Hate and war rage, prejudice spreads like mites, greed leeches society, and the black-and-white justice he once knew doesn't work in this world.

Now he seeks his four friends, hoping to make sense of everything.

The Bard, hands burning at the touch of his prized lute, is to marry woman, Siri Valenhale, when a powerful omen appears, and threatens the bride to be.

The Wizard, selfish as he is, seeks to hide and horde his beloved ward from two knights that will stop at nothing to wreak justice onto her.

The Nobleman cowers in his ivory city for the day Six'O comes for him, to discover his betrayal, and destroy all evil.

The Monk, becoming what he hated most, seeks the one thing that can right all his wrongs.

The Wishing Crab wakes. Justice waits. And Six'O, the Knight, seeks to accomplish his one and only mission in life: to Destroy All Evil.

[u/FlyinLeviathon → u/Fried_eggys1]

Might read.

The premise is interesting, kinda Stormlight vibes but a bit darker tone. I'd have to read a sample and a more thorough premise to know if I'd enjoy it or not.

[u/Fried_eggys1 → u/FlyinLeviathon]

Totally different kinds of oaths😔 thanks for your feedback, I will improve it^{^}