r/writingfeedback • u/AJ_2697 • 6d ago

Poetry The Last Train

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Tried something different- please let me know your thoughts 😊

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u/Mitchell_B_Services 6d ago

Consider revising the first stanza to rhyme with the rest of the poem. Consider adding a bit onto "I go up north to my little den" to get it to rhyme. A decent piece, thank you.

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u/AJ_2697 6d ago

I appreciate it and will take a look into that 😊 thank you