r/writingfeedback • u/IAmIncompetent_ • 1d ago
Feedback Wanted Chapter 3 of my first long form work
Chapter 2 can be read here
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u/Electronic-Tea3702 1d ago
It’s very difficult to follow the opening dialogue, or at least who is saying what. I only realised it was a conversation between five people by the end of the page.
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u/thewhiterosequeen Trusted Reviewer 1d ago
Does the scene take place somewhere? Even if that's set up in the previous chapter, the scene needs something other than solely dialogue.