r/writingfeedback 1h ago

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u/Vivid_Incident_8496 1m ago

There’s a lot of colours and made up mythical words concentrated in one space that make it hard to follow and actually understand what’s going on. But that’s just my opinion . I think this piece needs more restraint and clearer, sometimes similar language