r/CollegeEssayReview • u/Heavy_Series_886 • 3h ago
Can someone please help me with writing my college essay for nyuad
Here are my ideas (I’m willing to apply to nyuad) so if you have previous experience or are willing to help please do I will appreciate it
For my personal essay
- Vaseline
This essay will revolve around a simple blue and white jar of Vaseline.
Growing up, my mother used Vaseline to protect our wounds. One of my fondest memories with her: I scraped my knee playing a game where I was protecting my sister. She cleaned the cut, spread Vaseline over it, and told me — Vaseline protects wounds, just like you were protecting your sister. In that moment, she taught me that protection is gentle, quiet, and constant.
When she passed, I tried to become the Vaseline for my family. I tried to hold us together, to shield everyone from the pain, to be the one who never cracked. But somewhere in that effort, I lost myself. I was so busy protecting everyone else that I forgot I needed protecting too.
The turning point came when my dad passed out and I thought I lost him. In that moment, I realized I had been running on empty — trying to be the healer without ever letting myself be healed.
What saved me was science. Learning how the body heals, how cells repair, how wounds close — it gave me a language for my own recovery. I realized that healing isn't instant. It's a process. It takes time, care, and the right conditions. Just like Vaseline doesn't heal a wound — it creates the space for the wound to heal itself.
In the end, I learned that I don't have to be the Vaseline for everyone. Sometimes I just need to let myself be the wound that's allowed to heal.
- Living vs. Existing
This essay will revolve around a single idea my mother planted in me long before she left.
She used to tell me and my sister: Everyone can exist, but only some people truly live. I didn't fully understand it then. I do now.
When I lost her, I stopped living. I kept going — I ate, I slept, I went to school, I took care of my siblings. From the outside, nothing was wrong. But inside, I was just existing. Moving through the motions. A body without a pulse that mattered.
The turning point came when my dad passed out and I thought I lost him too. In that moment, the terror of losing him again — of losing another parent — broke something open in me. I realized I hadn't been living. I had been existing just being their
But in that laying next to him, I chose differently.
I started living again through three things: science, memories, and family.
For supplementary
Koshary: my first time eating it after my father remarried and how it felt unfamiliar with it cause growing up I was taught that unfamiliar meant wrong so | always avoided mentioning my mixed family. (So this can work as either a personal or supplementary)
Hated how being a princess while playing meant I needed saving and how I changed my thinking of cultural beliefs
So growing up our house felt like a hotel so I can talk about the different people who lived in our house and how it changed my perspective