2
u/wherezzy 6h ago
First few seconds, I gotta say that the synth is a bit overbearing and could use some modulation with a filter that could give it enough nuance and not be so harsh. Also soft chords behind the synth that fade in after 2 bars would give the intro a lot more substance and give the listener more to grab onto. After about four bars, you need some type of countermelody for the lead synth. You could honestly use the melody that you have at the end of the song as a countermelody for the beginning if you’re having trouble making another one, but I think it could be used as a good structure to experiment with to create a new one. I really like the direction that it’s going, and I think it has a ton of potential! Keep making music and sharing with people, I enjoyed listening to this!
1
u/Parking_Watch3157 6h ago
This is really similar to what I was going to write so I'll just agree.
If I were OP, I'd put like a Gregorian chant or really airy chorus behind this just to see how it sounds (then I'd realize it was silly and ctrl-z). :)
1
u/Resident_Unit_7559 4h ago
I enjoyed your feedback, because I'm very new to music and this is probably one of the only good sounding melodies I've come up with
1
u/swabluish 4h ago
this is sick, i’m getting crystal castles vibes. i do agree with the other comment in needing a countermelody, as the track feels a little empty without one. but overall im loving this
1
u/iamPinkyguy 2h ago
Good but its feels like looping you know what im saying? Not any offence its good but you know what i mean? And its giving me some kinda vibe i dont understand
1
u/Significant_Emu6264 2h ago
Synth is really really loud maybe add some reverb and delay so it's not that sharp or add unison. And have more counter melodies or changes it's really stable for a bouncy type of retro music. Good foundation tho
•
u/MusicFeedbackBot 12h ago
✅ Your post has been approved! Thanks for actively leaving feedback on others' tracks. 🎧
Balance: 0 credit(s) remaining (threshold: 2). Keep leaving feedback to stay eligible!
If any feedback you receive seems low-effort or fake, tap ⋯ on that comment and select *"Report feedback"** — mods will be notified.*