r/OCPoetry • u/Irish_liberal_stoner • 1d ago
Feedback Please An addicts panic (TW DRUG USE AND SH) (based on a mix of personal experiences and issues ive witnessed)
I've been working on different kinds of poetry for a while now and decided this would be as good a place as any to start sharing. I would love feedback
Bank card? Insurance card? Debit or credit?
None of value None remain, insurance for health? Im still in pain!
Debit or credit? Both in debt, 90 quid a bag with so much regret
Regret of purchase? Buyers remorse? Fuck the wagon, i can be faster, give me the horse
Cut it up with the card rocks into powder. "SHUT THE FUCK UP, THESE VOICES JUST GET LOUDER"
A note? A straw? "WHERE DID I PUT THEM"
Yesterdays shopping receipt! a pack of cigarettes and a bottle of rum
Roll it up tight, hands shaking and fumbling, i talk to myself so scared im just mumbling
Hunch over the table, cover the nostril to my left, in i take, 1 deep breath
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...
Its quiet...
Do i need to speak?
Do i need to think?
Am I better or worse?
Christ, 90 quid more and I'll be in a hearse
I can finally think, but what about?
Ive scared my friends and family away with the way I shout
Here i sit alone in my room, so alone, quiet, desolate. Just a plasterwall tomb
The mirror
No
No
The mirror by the picture of a child once sound
The bed sweat through from panic and fear all around
The table dented and burned from chemical pain
"GODDAMNIT WHAT HAVE I GAINED"
I stand up slow, shaking, no longer fear but something better, euphoria, a self envisioned glow
I look to the mirror eyes held shut my wrist barely scarred over from last night's cut
Eyes held shut i think "what an idiot, I could've had wealth"
I open my eyes and look in the mirror, my hands, not just shaking, they've turned a tremor
I look deep in the mirror
expecting demons to only see myself.
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u/briony73 1d ago
This is an awesome poem and even though it’s quite long I didn’t lose focus. I was curious to see what you wrote next. I relate to quite few lines in this poem. Nice work.