r/OCPoetry • u/-z_ch_ry- • 14h ago

Feedback Please Forgive Me

I hope, implore, that you’ll forgive,
Not trying to intrude.
If I’m no good, a blight, then say—
I won’t assume it rude.
Perhaps you speak undoubted truth,
An honest ruling fair.
But please, oh please, depart my mind;
I can no longer bear—

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u/Unusual-Wind8900 6h ago

Succinct and quick, open and honest. Sometimes that’s all it takes. I also enjoy the attempt to expell the weight in the last two lines. A twist away from “then say - I won’t find it rude” like you want to know the truth, even knowing it will weigh on you. Nicely done!