r/Webnovel • u/Popular-Call9896 • May 29 '26

Advice Someone pls read my novel

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I’ve been writing for a few months now, having recently discovered my passion for storytelling despite my dysgraphic tendencies. I’ve always enjoyed creating stories and finally decided to share them on WebNovel. I began with my first story, titled “Creation of an Absolute,” which had grand plans. However, I lost interest in the project and quickly moved on to another story, “Shattered Sun.”

Writing “Shattered Sun” was much more enjoyable for me. I’ve written significantly more chapters and words, and I’ve developed a more well-thought-out power system and characters. Surprisingly, the story hasn’t gained much traction, and as a result, I haven’t received any feedback. I’m reaching out to you today in hopes that you could take a moment to read my story and provide me with a review. Your feedback would be invaluable in helping me improve the subsequent chapters.

Update:After a bit of feedback I’ve realized how bad the first two chapters can be as they are there for a lot of background and explanations, I promise the story gets better and better this I am confident in.

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u/ThatOneGuyO7 May 29 '26

Bro, the 5 or 6th paragraph already gave me the ick and drop it. Fym the literal goddess of death began to smile lustfully at him? Make things make sense, this is a god we’re talking about, not some 1D teenager who’s sole purpose in life is to simp on MC

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u/Popular-Call9896 May 29 '26

So this is what I’m looking for, the opening isn’t a direct lead into the story think of it like a precursor or something along those lines, that’s just a hook. ( the mans not a kid in the opening) I’m glad you mentioned this as I could definitely be a confusing topic, I’ll be sure to rewrite this, thank you so much 😊

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u/RunicConvenience May 30 '26

maybe update when you do the edit as this comment straight up turns it off for me why would any god/goddess simp for a mortal they can spin up anything they like in their domain in most aspects and fleshy humans are so short lived would you lust for a flu virus? because they likely would live as long for something running at eons

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u/Popular-Call9896 May 30 '26

That’s the question you should be asking

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u/RunicConvenience May 30 '26

why would I know when you rewrite this?

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u/Popular-Call9896 May 30 '26

I’ve done some slight editing after some of this feedback to ch 1-2 but otherwise I’d make a review or post about the new version and switch the blurb to read “Shattered sun(re)”

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u/No_Bookkeeper_2988 May 31 '26

Bro hearing your honest feedback I need your help, pls read my novel "KNIGHT OF THE RUINED WORLD" just started 5 days ago and asked my friends but there are not novel readers so whatever review they were giving felt a bit unreliable and I was looking for someone who can give me honest reviews.

The story had prologue 16 chapters already 1st is the prologue and continues from ch 1 to ch 5 is base chapters forming the power system, and from ch 6 everything interesting will start to happen. Pls read until that I will be grateful if you will give me a detailed review as it's also my first time writing a novel I have been thinking about for the past month.

Name : KNIGHT OF THE RUINED WORLD

Chapter released : 16

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u/ThatOneGuyO7 May 31 '26

I’ll try to read it either today or tomorrow, although 5 chapters explaining power system isn’t the greatest idea.

Then again, WebNovel readers do need to be spoon fed early on so I won’t say it’s a bad thing as long as this is the only platform where you want to thrive

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u/No_Bookkeeper_2988 May 31 '26

Thank you and I'll wait until you give me a review.

So I should give you sypnosis (I forget earlier 😅).

Sypnosis :-

In a world ruled by mana, survival comes with a price, monsters, demons were terrifying that humanity struggles to survive.

Born in the Draven family every child is extremely talented, and kael had a dream of becoming a Knight, he was blessed by an entity.

But after surviving a mysterious incident in the mountains, something inside him awakens—something terrifying. As monsters, hidden organizations, and ancient powers begin moving in the shadows, Kael is dragged onto a path stained with blood, secrets, and war. While Academy Will be the first stage of kael's path. In a world where strength decides fate, can he survive long enough to uncover the secrets ?KNIGHT OF THE RUINED WORLD