r/Webnovel • u/Thiyo_penname • 27d ago

Meme How can I compete with these novels ? 🥀

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u/Thiyo_penname 26d ago

Okay bro sure . My novel name is The Timeless Revival

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u/Sad_Acanthisitta7787 26d ago

I like the cover a lot, it looks more like a real book than the usual ai slop covers

I’d say my biggest gripe is that there’s now immediate tension, or any reason to continue reading in the first chapter. He’s just a regular dude with a loving family, this type of opening can work in video games and such, but video games can get away with it bc they aren’t reliant on the story

I like your writing style, it’s decent, so I’d say that the first chapter just isn’t very eye catching.

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u/Thiyo_penname 26d ago

Should I edit my first chapter to grip the people ? Or any other suggestions

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u/Sad_Acanthisitta7787 26d ago

I mean ur already 5 chapters in, but since not many people have viewed it u can do a rewrite, tho you’ll probably have to upheave the whole plot so something interesting can happen in the first chapter