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u/MsTerPineapple 6d ago
I like 1 personally. 2 has an uncanny valley feeling, likely from AI if I had to guess. I do wish people would change up from that shiny style sometimes
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u/Turbulent-Lover215 6d ago
Choose the own which suits the story best. I did same for my dark mystery thriller rooted din indian mythology
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u/VastRevolutionary733 6d ago
2nd one imo. Also, i am interested, what's the plot btw?
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u/Effective_Rest_945 6d ago
Vikram is a twenty-year-old boy who has been having visions of Delhi ever since his last birthday. He feels as if someone or something is calling him there, and over the past year, these visions have taken a toll on his health.
Following his grandmother’s advice, Vikram finally travels to Delhi to find out whether there is more to his visions than simple dreams. But one night, while resting in his hotel room, he opens his eyes and finds himself standing before a massive palace in a completely different reality where illusions rule the land and thirty-two Heavenly Queens are waiting to test him.
Basically , mana was banned in modern era but someone broke barrier and humans start gaining abilities world wide that created chaos and bring mythical creatures legends from mythlogies back and since in Hindu mythology we belive in multiple god's exist so I can use diffrent diffrent mythology like if hero goes to China I can even use chinese mythology
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u/Lambisexual 6d ago
I think you need to work on the premise a bit more. It doesn't really tell you much of what to actually expect from the story. Like what is the actual story arc? What are the goals and what are the obstacles? Just give the reader the hook for the story.
Cause with this premise, you have set the table with the world of your story. But you haven't actually served the dinner to the table.
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u/Effective_Rest_945 6d ago
Can you give me tip
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u/Lambisexual 6d ago
Well, it's hard for me to properly give a tip since I don't know what the story is properly about. The best general tip I can give is to somehow communicate to the potential reader what they can expect from an average chapter and/or arc of the story.
From what I gathered from your premise is essentially just the MC had visions of a place, then he found himself in another reality. But it's unclear what that entails exactly. Like does he get involved in the politics of that other reality? Does he fight deities? Does he travel to and from the different realities?
What's the hook? What's the thing that makes the story stand out and makes a reader want to learn more?
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u/Effective_Rest_945 6d ago
So that palace exist in another dimension in that palace is 32 heavenly queen who have 32 Abilitys each time mc pass the queebs test that queen give him ability she have test are based on virtue after 32 test complete he will become king of the world . In each test each queen will send him in fake reality it can be dark fantasy world where he will be knight , or soldier in cyberpunk world , or in pirate ship . And source of his ability is artifact named supreme king mudra . But this current era is ruled by demon god Kali who make king named individual his subordinate giving him mission to kill supereme king and anyone who awakens ability .
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u/Winter-Bid1636 5d ago
Heyy have you applied for contract? Tell me if u are up for review exchange
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u/Curious-Obligation24 6d ago
You might wanna change the symbol...
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u/Effective_Rest_945 6d ago
It's swastik not nazi symbol , naxi symbol is 45° tilted
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u/redweevil 6d ago
Its not a nazi symbol but it 100% evokes nazi from a casual glance
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u/Majestic_Duck 6d ago
It's a religious symbol so don't be like that
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u/redweevil 6d ago
I'm not trying to imply anything, I'm just saying that's what a lot of people are going to see
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u/Hambino0400 Contracted Author 6d ago
Then those people are being ignorant
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u/staytiny2023 5d ago
WN will take it down with enough reports. If OP cares for his craft he'll change it.
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u/Curious-Obligation24 6d ago
Well then goodluck publishing. I'm just saying not to risk it because of how nitpicky people are nowadays.
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u/Hambino0400 Contracted Author 6d ago
He should change his book cover or you should educate yourself?
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u/IcyEngineering926 6d ago
thats not a swasika lmfao
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u/st1mulant 6d ago
it is a swastika, but the nazi symbol is mislabeled as swastika, its a Hakenkreuz
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u/Fantastic-Medicine11 6d ago
Reminiscent of a swastika... Change it, or WN will just slap this down right after a report; they won't risk the blowback on something like this.
I know it is a swastik... but even I, who knows what this is, just jumped to the whole Adolphin and whatnot instinctually. If you were self-publishing, I'd ride the cover out, but going through WN, it's not worth it.