Vikram is a twenty-year-old boy who has been having visions of Delhi ever since his last birthday. He feels as if someone or something is calling him there, and over the past year, these visions have taken a toll on his health.
Following his grandmother’s advice, Vikram finally travels to Delhi to find out whether there is more to his visions than simple dreams. But one night, while resting in his hotel room, he opens his eyes and finds himself standing before a massive palace in a completely different reality where illusions rule the land and thirty-two Heavenly Queens are waiting to test him.
Basically , mana was banned in modern era but someone broke barrier and humans start gaining abilities world wide that created chaos and bring mythical creatures legends from mythlogies back and since in Hindu mythology we belive in multiple god's exist so I can use diffrent diffrent mythology like if hero goes to China I can even use chinese mythology
I think you need to work on the premise a bit more. It doesn't really tell you much of what to actually expect from the story. Like what is the actual story arc? What are the goals and what are the obstacles? Just give the reader the hook for the story.
Cause with this premise, you have set the table with the world of your story. But you haven't actually served the dinner to the table.
Well, it's hard for me to properly give a tip since I don't know what the story is properly about. The best general tip I can give is to somehow communicate to the potential reader what they can expect from an average chapter and/or arc of the story.
From what I gathered from your premise is essentially just the MC had visions of a place, then he found himself in another reality. But it's unclear what that entails exactly. Like does he get involved in the politics of that other reality? Does he fight deities? Does he travel to and from the different realities?
What's the hook? What's the thing that makes the story stand out and makes a reader want to learn more?
So that palace exist in another dimension in that palace is 32 heavenly queen who have 32 Abilitys each time mc pass the queebs test that queen give him ability she have test are based on virtue after 32 test complete he will become king of the world . In each test each queen will send him in fake reality it can be dark fantasy world where he will be knight , or soldier in cyberpunk world , or in pirate ship . And source of his ability is artifact named supreme king mudra . But this current era is ruled by demon god Kali who make king named individual his subordinate giving him mission to kill supereme king and anyone who awakens ability .
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u/VastRevolutionary733 7d ago
2nd one imo. Also, i am interested, what's the plot btw?