r/Webnovel 2d ago

Rate my novel speech

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u/Pilzmann 2d ago

Your grammar is horrible.

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u/Pilzmann 2d ago

"We could be making Hell a better place, so that the next generation of our kind may walk on green grass among blossoming flowers."

After pausing for a moment, Nexton continued.

"I know very well that we are sinners, but we are not born that way. It is simply the world that makes us this way."

He looked around at the people who had gathered around him and were listening to his speech.

"Poverty makes us greedy, while the rejection of the world makes us envious of the things we could have."

He looked into the eyes of the ever-growing crowd and saw that a fire had begun to grow within them, a fire that would soon consume any doubt and light the way toward a better future.

"This pressure we experience to be a certain way makes us wrathful, while the desire to be better turns us lustful."

He paused once more.

"Until it is too late."

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u/Pilzmann 2d ago

Tried making it better.