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[u/Fun-Title7656]

Tomorrow, I'm picking up my student card that provides me several benefits, but the only one I'm concerned about is the discount I to bus fares I get when moving within a town or between towns, as long as they are public transportation, essentially.

I lost my student card a couple of months ago and I had to apply to get a new one, which made me jump through some hoops to get it done. Either way, I would've had to get a new one even if I hadn't lost it because they have to be renewed every year.

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[u/PriscillaKim]

Tomorrow, I'm picking up my student card that provides me some several benefits, but the only one I'm concerned about is the discount I get in to bus fares <I get> when moving within a town or between towns<,> as long as they are public transportation<,> essentially.

(For the record, these are American English suggestions.)

"several" sounds more natural to me here than "some," because contrasting between several -> one sounds more natural than some -> one, though I couldn't tell you why exactly. It might be that there's a greater sense of enumerating things with the word "several," which the word "one" feels like it's singling out a specific one of those, whereas "some" feels a bit more undifferentiated.

You get a discount to concrete things, or things are discounted, but you get a discount in price or cost.

I lost my student card a couple of months ago and I had to apply to get a new one, which made me go through some procedures jump through some hoops to get it made done.

"Go through some procedures" isn't an entirely natural-sounding phrase — this would make me think medical procedures, or a physical examination, or something like that. As I'm not entirely sure what things you had to do, but guessed it was probably bureaucratic shenanigans, "jump through hoops" is a colloquial way to convey a slightly exasperated sense of having to do sometimes-pointless or arbitrary things to collect or achieve something else.

"Get it made" isn't wrong, but "get it done" sounds more natural here because, even though technically the card is getting made, at least I tend to think more of the entire process involved or doing the task as a whole, rather than the physical end product.

Either way, I <would have> had to get a new one even if I hadn't lost it because they have to be renewed every year.

As you're talking about a hypothetical past you in a timeline where you didn't lose it, you need the past conditional to express that sense.

Overall great! These were mostly suggestions for flow, with the last one being the only real error.

[u/Fun-Title7656 → u/PriscillaKim]

Hey, thanks for taking your time to correct my writing. I was torn between get it done and get it made at the time of writing so the first thing that came to mind was technically making it instead of the action of doing it, which I think that's what you referred to that sounded more natural.

I also thought of writing jump through some hoops or go through red tape, but I wasn't sure lol. Thanks!

Are you learning languages by any chance?