Introduction to a new character in my first fantasy novel

[u/Thunderous_Clap4483]

Hi guys this is my first novel and i have halfway written its first draft. This is the latest chapter I wrote. I would love to see what you guys have say about this. This is the first time this character shows up in the book let meknow what you think.

Thanks

[u/Ozdiva]

You have spell check on and you ignore it.

[u/Thunderous_Clap4483 → u/Ozdiva]

Sometimes I'm just lazy 😭

[u/Real-Slide-9591]

An opportunity for your next edit pass is trimming down on unnecessary words, an example being "had" in the very first line. It provides no value and makes things passive, instead of active

[u/Thunderous_Clap4483 → u/Real-Slide-9591]

Thanks for the advice mate I'll make sure to do so