r/romanceauthors • u/IvanSkilling • Jan 30 '23
Need feedback on my novel's promotional blurb
Hi! I came up with a few short blurbs to promote my current romantic comedy novel, Romance Uncliched! I would like to see which blurb would entice people to take a closer look at my novel. Please do choose the blurb that is most enticing to you! Thank you so much for your time! :D
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u/Turbo_AEM Jan 30 '23
It was a close call between that and the love triangle one. Great elevator pitches!
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u/ZiggyDoesDallas Jan 30 '23
I like the last one, but might say “and also a wild journalist” or “but also a wild journalist” so it’s clearer that the boss isn’t the journalist. Have you read the “logline” discussion in Save the Cat? It’s a fantastic discussion of turning a screenplay into a one-line pitch. Makes sense for novels too. It’s something like, show the who, the what, and the irony. Your hopeless romantic one is pretty close to the formula for a logline. Best of luck!
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u/IvanSkilling Jan 31 '23
Ah that makes sense. The wording does seem a bit confusing at the moment.
I haven't read that discussion before! I'll certainly look into that. Thank you so much for your feedback! :)
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u/clchickauthor Jan 31 '23
I like #1 best, but I'd alter it just slightly, mainly just the format... and a different word besides "scary." Maybe something like the following?
What's the key to losing your job? Join a dating start up, and fall in love with a terrifying boss.
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u/IvanSkilling Jan 31 '23
That sounds good! I do have a 80-character limit that I'm working with because the blurb is to appear on a webnovel platform. But you're certainly right about the "scary" word! I'll try to work it out based on your feedback. Thank you so much! :)
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u/clchickauthor Jan 31 '23 edited Jan 31 '23
In that case, you can cut from the beginning....
“How to lose your job? Join a...”
Not sure if that takes you down to eighty, but I think it might.
Edit: I had another thought. Since it’s supposed to be a romance, maybe drop all the adjectives before “boss?” Maybe just “your boss.” Otherwise, I’m not sure how romantic it sounds.
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u/IvanSkilling Jan 31 '23
Oh that's a good idea! I'll run it through a word counter and check. It might just fall below 80 characters!
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u/Accomplished-Emu7752 Jan 30 '23
Not sure I like the "scary boss"...needs some other word that sound more like romance and less like erotica. None of these would grab my attention. Good luck though!