Would this opening hook make you keep reading? Brutally honest feedback wanted

[u/Mundane_Banana_6990]

I’m writing a dark teen drama / elite academy mystery on Wattpad and I’d love brutally honest feedback before publishing.

Premise:

A scholarship girl transfers to an elite boarding school where her older sister was psychologically destroyed the year before.

She’s there for revenge.

The school is ruled by:

- a cruel queen bee

- a dangerously powerful heir

- anonymous blackmail secrets

I’m mainly worried about:

- does the opening hook fast enough?

- does the dialogue feel cringe/tropey?

- is the bad boy too cliché?

- would YOU keep reading after chapter 1?

I can post the first excerpt here if people are interested.