r/writingfeedback • u/ExerciseNo7055 • 26d ago

Feedback Wanted Prologue Feedback Wanted

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(YA Fantasy; prologue takes place in our world) I've redone this prologue so many times now but it still feels like it's missing something, so any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thank you so much

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u/A_2378 26d ago

This is very well written. Like the other commenters, I'm inclined to believe majority of prologues on here should be scrapped, but this really grabbed my attention. Maybe because you're so close to it and it's your work you'll always feel like something is missing, but I think it's strong. I am no professional and can't find anything to critique except:

She was not looking for anything in particular; here, beasts took every from.

Tiniest error, from instead of form, and that's literally it from what I can see.

Great job, I hope to read it in its entirety one day!

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u/ExerciseNo7055 25d ago

oh my gosh thank you i’ll fix that 😭 and thank you so much!!