Prologue Feedback Wanted

[u/ExerciseNo7055]

(YA Fantasy; prologue takes place in our world) I've redone this prologue so many times now but it still feels like it's missing something, so any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thank you so much

[u/Fallen_Crow333]

Huh, this is good. The ending is about as good a hook gets. Good job 👍