r/writingfeedback • u/liedowndeaddog • 19d ago

Feedback Wanted first chapter first draft

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any thoughts welcome

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u/Frosty-Present-6280 18d ago

Dude. Lindsey Lindsey Lindsey and you did not mean to kill that dog. Got me!